Waltzing Across Land and Sea

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Casting his light for the Sky to see.

As the curtain of Night still hung.

Waltzing across both land and sea.



The weighted night must flee.

As the morning dove sung.

Casting his light for the Sky to see.


The mist of Night can no more be.

As the blue bells of morning rung.

Waltzing across both land and sea.



The azure sky broke carefree.

As the hymn of life rolled off my tongue.

Casting his light for the Sky to see.


Déjà vu, could not foresee.

The casting new of colors flung.

Waltzing across both land and sea.


Filling this new day with heartfelt glee.

This gifted elixir that makes us young.

Casting his light for the Sky to see.

Waltzing across both land and sea.

 

Author's Note

Alternate version of: Curtain of Night still hung

Reviews

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Cherrie ... where there are Blue Skies and the Wise...

there will be a New Jerusalem for everyone

Till Kingdom Come... Amen... Pat

[Davidgeo]

It's crazy how relatively easy it is to look at the sun in a way that wouldn't make sense just a couple decades ago.

The light shines and we reflect. The sun does not care. Just the humans, I think most animals are internally laughing at us.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Good Morning David. True modern man has more time to reflect. But don't forget those silly ancestors worshiped such things. While most modern people give their hearts to money. I don't want either side of that coin.
PS the Paltypus has no right to launch at anyone except maybe the Blue Footed Booby :)

[William Michael Reeves]

The morning dove as the sun? Flying over our skies, dancing on the winds with wings that sing color? Pretty cool image. Nice form too. I like that antithetical phrase about deja Vu not being able to foresee. Good stuff!

[Cherrie Palmer]

I love this form and don't use it near enough. It really layers on the images. Lasagna for the soul.

[William Michael Reeves]

What I like about it is when we come up with a couple good lines we get to use them more than once.

[Cherrie Palmer]

As a rule I like to write this style in pairs. Choosing a line from the first poem to continue in the 2nd.

[William Michael Reeves]

Good idea. Like a crown of Sonnets where the last line becomes the first line of the next one.

[Bhuyanshi Talukdar]

This is a beautiful and uplifting poem that celebrates the arrival of a new day. The imagery is vivid and evocative, painting a picture of the sun casting its light across the land and sea, dispelling the darkness of night. The use of repetition and rhyme gives the poem a musical quality that enhances its emotional impact. The poet's choice of words is both elegant and simple, creating a sense of wonder and joy that is infectious. Overall, this is a lovely and inspiring poem that captures the beauty and hope of a new day. Thank you for sharing it

[Cherrie Palmer]

Thank you for such a beautiful and uplifting review.
I truly appreciate it and again thank you for reading my poem.

[Bhuyanshi Talukdar]

My pleasure 😊 if you have time do check out my poems too. I would be grateful!

[red93]

Another Fabulous Villanelle Cherrie, and once again you have absolutely nailed this complex form to perfection
✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️

[duff]

The word weight caught me. The burden doesn't care. And a partner not needed to dance. Nice work.

[emmajoygreen]

A brilliance of meter within a chain of three repeated thoughts. Hopefully 'Brava!' says it all, Cherrie.

'The mist of Night can no more be.
As the blue bells of morning rung.
Waltzing across both land and sea.'

[Cherrie Palmer]

Thank you Emma. I can't say enough how great these times out. It's like painting by numbers. Everyone should try it 😊

[emmajoygreen]

Will take you advice, as often have! Wishing you a bright day, here the sun's shining outside and within - for a golden change. Hugs for both you and your fine - and beautiful, poem. I had my time out at a Retreat recently, just me, calm, solitude, plain food bur, chat if needed. Bliss and time to think make good 'timesout' Hugs for the day, dear you. ('Trying' is usually what am called!)

[Cherrie Palmer]

The retreat sounds great. I'm so glad you got to go. We need to unplug sometimes.

[emmajoygreen]

Have been before, Cherrie at certain times. Religion is there, of course it is.. but as should be is there for people who need.. something not in their world, if only for hours: peace, self incognito to demands, time.. and so much more.
Hugs, dear friend.. and a touch of extra peace for your Self

[Cherrie Palmer]

I hope you are finding your feet and a steady routine. These days. Remember keep it simple
My own version of KISS
Keep
It
Simple
Sweetie
:)

[emmajoygreen]

How lovely... thank you so vereee much. :)

[Ken Simm.]

Beautiful like mist across the sea. Construction, subject and feel all just pitch perfect.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Good morning Ken and thank you 😊

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Dear cherrie
This is exquisite
I don’t say that lightly
It’s beautiful truly

[Cherrie Palmer]

Thank you Julie 😊 I hope all is well with you this fine day.

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

Hi thanks
Yes busy writing ha ha
Cloudy coolish Sunday morning
Have a good day night

[Betty Hermelee]

I like the repetition at each phrase it makes the poem pop out like a painting…..I like the different shades of like you speak of….I like the colors flung across land and sea…..and light and shadows that we see at days end….lovely
Best
B.

[Cherrie Palmer]

I always enjoy writing ✍️ this format. It seems to dial-in the topic.
Thank you Betty for stopping by. I am so pleased you liked it.

[Betty Hermelee]

Of course, and you’re welcome
Best
B.