Mirrors

This one is still in editing mode, just let me know your impressions.

Two mirrors facing each other: there is forever

what if she's

a shooting star 

and it's all

she'd ever be

I could hurl the entire world

into the next ice age

Face to face

seems like

just another place

the morning light

poking fun through

the window

They say it's

rude to point

well it's about time

we start pointing

all our fingers

there are more of them

than people

Let's all start pointing our fingers,

because we've lost our voices

Once the storm has passed

the eye is left 

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"They say it's/ rude? i think you meant.

interesting piece...we do need to point fingers at ourselves, because how can we look into the mirror and live with ourselves for letting everything get so out of hand.

we do not speak out anymore...we did in the sixties..now everyone is too quiet...
to hell with rude, let's just do it.
let's get some movement...
perhaps we should hurl this world into the next ice age...
because we move like we are frozen in place.

[Frontier]

Thanks for pointing it out. :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

such an influential piece for me...i relate fully.

[Jessica Lynn Polley]

Wow this is awesome and such a powerful meaning. I really enjoy all of your work but I thing this is one of my favorites...it does not whisper it screams and I love that about it. You have floored me with your message because you are so right. To hell with pleasantries it is time we started being honest. The flow of this poem is spot on and I especially love the first stanza. Over all this is just a great piece and I love it. Thank you for the great write!

[Frontier]

And thank YOU for the wonderful review.

[Zakari Schmidt]

This is REALLY good. "Two mirrors facing each other, there is forever"...
I cannot get over that. Or the ending. Very powerful and totally cool

[Frontier]

Aww thanks Zach! I was debating the placement of words for that part...but I'm glad it resounded with you as is. If you can't "get over it" I've done my job well. :) !!

[Sunya]

Truly said..when the storm has passed, the eye is left :) I would like to make a song out of this cuz it would sound very melodious :)

[Frontier]

You are welcome to, thanks Sunya :)

[just Penny]

I like the title of mirrors and, after reading your poem, think that what we give out is reflected back at us. To lose our voices is a dangerous thing but it's becoming a reality in society today. But then "freedom" is an illusion and the scariest thing of all is the apathy that nobody seems to care what's happening :( I loved this write. It's deep and full of meaning. Penny

[Frontier]

Indeed, it's not a direct straight path. Thanks Penny.

[Ty]

Your voice shines through this piece. It's true people need to wake up and start doing something about the way things are. A great piece.

[Frontier]

Thanks Ty! So true.

[Inda]

This is another great piece, the metaphors are clear and the language you used makes reading this a breeze, great job!

[Frontier]

Thanks again, Inda!