Village of the Damned

Village of the Damned

A Poem by Christopher J
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This is a random poem that I wrote in 2008, according to the dates on the Word file.

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The flashing of lightning brightens the sky

The rain almost flooding the beaten ground

I stand here and find myself wondering why

In the busiest village, there’s no one around

 

The village, usually so full of life,

So still and silent on this dreadful night

I can see no one, no man and no wife,

And all i can sense is fear and fright

 

I see a faint silhouette in the dark

But it moves too quick for my eyes to see

I don’t hear the noises of footsteps or hooves

As my mind starts to wonder “What could it be?”

 

Just as the question vacates from my mind

I hear noises that don’t belong in this world

Whatever it is came fast from behind

The strike to the head sends me into a swirl

 

The village fades, my ears full of ringing,

I fall to the ground, my hands on my head

In the distance i hear the faint sound of singing

And wonder if i’m still alive, or dead.

 

When i come too, panic floods to my heart

It is still dark so it didn’t last long

I kneel up, and all around my eyes dart

Trying to see if anything’s wrong

 

But the village, exactly the same as before

But now i see many shapes in the dark

I try to lift myself up from the floor

As one of the creatures lets out a bark

 

A Flash of lightning shows me my foe

Wolf like creatures, like something out of a dream

I look for places to run to, places to go

And to my surprise i hear a mournful scream

© 2012 Christopher J


Author's Note

Christopher J
I wrote this 5 years ago, be gentle. The rhyming scheme may be off or not make sense at all. It's also unfinished but wanted to upload something on my first day.

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Nuh! Don't write anymore! O:< Leave it as that! It creates a sort of incomplete image and it's great because it leaves suspense. I personally like it. It leaves us to wonder where is the character and why is his village so empty...Is it that he's diving into a pool of solitude and finds himself trapped into a hell that he himself created? Or was it just a random story with no moral but beautiful as it is?

Posted 8 Years Ago


I think the imagery it creates is very good and scary at times. nicely done.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Christopher J

8 Years Ago

Thanks :)

Even though it's 5 years on, do you think I should try and carry it on and g.. read more
Riley Mistwood

8 Years Ago

I think you could add a bit after the mournful scream, the rest I think is great. It really paints a.. read more
I really like this. It's cool. I like the attitude and flow of the poem. It's great. Keep writing. :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Christopher J

8 Years Ago

Thanks :)

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Christopher J
Christopher J

Birmingham, West Midlands, United Kingdom



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I'm terrible at writing about myself. Feel free to message me and ask anything you wish. 24 year old Brit who has been writing for many years, with an aspiration to be a published author, although .. more..

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