Unscrupulous Uncertainties

Wrestling with the morals of ending a relationship while loving another. And you wish you could ask them if there's a chance. But unspeakable love is unspeakable.

Our rosebushes have not yet bloomed

But the quiet quandary has loomed

Is this floral fusion already doomed?

Forgive me if I erroneously assumed

I over-oxygenate with hope 
So pull me up or cut the rope 
Do you grimace as I grope? 
Should I narrow or widen my scope?

I cannot read your lips through the mist

Are you waiting for my unimpeded kiss

Are you enjoying the unspoken trysts 

Is there even an effort to resist? 

Are these silent struggles solely mine

Are you just simply being kind

I feel that I'm running out of time

While you saunter through your diamond mine

This has been a lovely view 
But my eyes are craving something new 
Take me or leave me. Give me a clue 
I hate that you don't need me like I need you.

Reviews

[Nisreen]

There is nothing worse than those walks we never had
or the relationships we never pursued
This silent longing is torment
Only if two are meant for each other
This silence speaks volumes that could never be taken into words

And i guess their souls find one another

I loved reading this one

[Cobblestone Traveler]

Thank you for your insightful review. It is absolutely a form of torment.

[Nisreen]

I guess once you feel love for someone else
Its tîme to end The relationship you have
read moreI guess once you feel love for someone else
Its tîme to end The relationship you have
I Think. If you could love another then The person you are With means little to you

[Davidgeo]

Your form is/was too rigid. This show's you have an extra fine grasp of the English language though.

Quite well done; cheers to you and your dazzling words.

[Cobblestone Traveler]

I appreciate the constructive criticism. I agree it was a little starchy. Thanks so much for reading!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

really like the last line...but i just really understand this piece on different levels...

was in a relationship as another emerged...and it was such a quandary...
still felt so much for the person i was with...but the intrigue of the other...

was a real battle of conscience and emotion....you reflected me in this.

j.

[Cobblestone Traveler]

Wow. I really appreciate you sharing your viewpoint. Thank you for the review!

[Wildflower]

Wow!!!!! I find this so clever. Your flexibility in word usage is enviable. Love it!!!!

[Cobblestone Traveler]

I'm flattered by your kind words. Thank you very much!

[Lifeless Energy]

This hits me in my soul.
You've effortless used the rhyming scheme you implemented and I applaud you for writing so well.

[Cobblestone Traveler]

I appreciate the high praise! I'm really happy that you enjoyed it.

[skeetwood]

This is a gorgeous poem! A lot of people I know bash rhyme schemes these days, but I think yours is very effective and adds a cadence that is really pleasing to the ear. A lot of these words are also well utilized and efficient; I didn't see a single unnecessary word. Your last line, though, is what really sold the poem to me. Italics are really underrated and I think it added to the frustration that seemed to be building throughout the poem. tl;dr This is a really good poem :)

[Cobblestone Traveler]

Thank you so much for your thoughtful review! That last line is actually the first thing I thought of and got the ball rolling.

[Amy R]

Beautiful poem,
loved it!!!

"I hate that you don't need me like I need you."

my favorite line! it carries such powerful meaning to so much souls out there today.
keep on writing.

[Cobblestone Traveler]

Thank you so much for your kind words, Amy!

[Amy R]

ur welcome there.