Canyon Dreams

When I said forever, I know that I meant forever, and I won't let you down, I can always be found, and I'm always around. -Avril Lavigne

Iron gate

Desert dream fate

Clean slate

I'd wrap your body up in a blanket

And listen to the beat of of inevitable heartbreak

Restaurant far away

Full of no one we know

Still, 

we find a way to cause mischief everywhere we go

Abandoned plastic cave

Food carts

And some language I can't read

I hold onto you

And you crumble

I took one hundred tumbles

Yeah, I took the fall

And gave you my all

You,

lovely and sick at the mall

Abanoned, Nara Dreamland storms

I was scorned, straight in the back

Chips of white pristine rattle and fall

You were my temple

Now your crumbling

Go ahead

For you, I'll still stall

If you need me to I'll haul you to the ends of the earth

Break through the cracks in the walls

Make a call

I never gave up on you

Not at all

Gray couch

Black jeans

See your arms

In my dream, honey.

Author's Note

Thank you so much for reading! Inspired by my story and I often have dreams of canyons for whatever reason. Feel free to share an odd or cool dream of yours in the comments, if you'd like to! Have a wonderful day. (:

Reviews

[Betty Hermelee]

This an interesting dream.... it almost seems to me like two hobos wandering in the desert, with not too many possessions, but there is definitely a friendship here, one looks after the other, no matter what happens... I like your images, and there is a down to earth feeling about this poem, the words you use, the setting and the camaraderie. well done!
Best, B.

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you so much! I love your interpretation of it. I appreciate the review so much!

[Betty Hermelee]

You’re very welcome!😊

[LostSage]

Here's my comment... you're so cute!!! and guess what? since you know what my favorite rodent is (who has a favorite rodent?) I wanna know what your favorite noodle is... angel hair, fettuccine, rotini, rigatoni, penne. I tend toward ziti. haha just playing with you. just having fun. have a superb day! jeff

[LostSage]

Wow. Nice stuff.... I am going send your own words back atcha....
restaurant far away full of no one we know
yeah I took the fall and gave you my all
I never gave up on you, not at all
that's gorgeous
A+ for colacat
have a superb day. Jeff

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you so much! You have a great day as well! Thank you for coming back and sharing such kind reviews.

[LostSage]

You are one of my faves, it will never change

[Shelley Warner]

While I read your story, I thought about girl friendships. The message of commitment to friendship is uplifting I have a friend from junior high over 50 years ago. We don't live near each other, but we keep in touch. She was there for me when my first love died in Vietnam. (I have a story about that entitled "Give Peace a Chance"). She's coming to town next week and we'll get together.

[Vertigo Cat1111]

I’m so glad you keep in touch! That’s a wonderful, powerful friendship that lasts through the years. I’m so sorry for you’re loss, but I’m also glad you had someone so close to you that was there for you. Thank you for the wonderful review!

[Shelley Warner]

Thank you, I was very young when I lost Harvey. But I loved again and lost again. And now I love again and it's pretty wonderful.

[emmajoy]

' I never gave up on you - Not at all - Gray couch - Black jeans - See your arms - In my dream, honey.'

Thosse final words after such a vivid - near raw, flow of emotions is almost a veil over the past, a release of tension but in the end, not an abandonment. Memories remain, are etched.. clear definition of what was, still is. A fine write. felt by this reader.

[Chris Shaw]

An emotional piece, straight from the soul and played out like a movie. He was her temple. That says it all. To lose that is devastating. She still holds a torch for him and it sounds as though she always will. Raw feelings here of hurt. If they are continually played out in dreams, that adds to the hurt. There is an unconditional love thread here. That is painful if he is no longer part of the story. Much to glean from this piece Colacat. Well done.

Chris

[Poetic Beauty]

Sounds like a tale of two lovers traveling for whatever the reason and one is falling apart while the other is trying to hold them together.

I often dream of the Arizona desert yet have never been there so I totally understand dreaming of canyons

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Sixth stanza, third line, did you mean "you're"? That is how I read it.
"Thunder only happens when it's raining" Dreams only happen when we're sleeping...
Sometimes I get in precarious situations in my dreams...one I had since a little kid. I am falling from a cliff but wake up before I hit the ground...always, just before.
If someone is our temple we will go to great lengths to protect that person, to revere that person.
An old hymn we sang in church..."God is love, and he who abides in love, abides in God"
but I don't mean that in a religious sense...more of the sanctity of preserving someone who has our heart.
j.

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Yes, I did mean ‘you’re’, nice catch and thank you for pointing it out! Dreams about falling seem to happen so often and they’re rarely pleasant! What you said about the hymn is extremely interesting and I really enjoyed taking a moment to really think about how that’s true! Thank you so much for another wonderful review!

[Seriana]

This is such an interesting piece! I like that your work is often written in such a REAL context. Raw and emotions right here, like I'm watching a scene and feel what you must have felt. I read the quote first and am a fan of Avril's, so I almost had her music in my head while reading, though tried not to. Had images of oranges, reds, tans and blues though. Dreams. They get us sometimes, huh?

Don't have any to share off the top except this one about moths....It was too vivid not to write about. I can till see them when I shut my eyes...
https://www.writerscafe.org/writing/Seriana/2115712/

Thanks for sharing your work!

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Ooh, can’t wait to read that! Also, yes, another Avril fan! Thank you so so much. This is such a kind review and I truly do appreciate it. (: