RV

This place we live, it is not where we belong, and I miss who we were in the town that we could call our own'- Paramore

In the old room

In the old house

With old friends on an dusty TV

And it feels like home

The water spout

One day I'll be here with the pink flowers

When the rain is pouring down

I'm never far from home

Nor do I roam alone

This lake is set in stone

Ladybugs and grass and petals in the storm

Somewhere to lay

Somewhere so warm

There's pencil written words

In a New Year's Journal

For you, nothing

Not even the lightning in the sky will be good enough

For any of you

Is this the RV I dreamed?

The misadventures at the restaurant

Fear in the red mart

Mystery and anxiety of red canyons

An arcade token fountain

So, we've come to an end

A gray wall in a grocery shop

But, damn it, I don't wanna stop

I'm leaving the city

Even though it was so pretty

But this rebellion's pretty shattered and s****y

I got to follow my literal dreams

All that green grass on the floor

Who could ask for more?

The stars shout

'It's no big deal

You needed to change

You're better off this way'

I've been thinking about 

Things that usually scare me like

Rollercoasters and break-in

Obscurity of safety blankets

And I don't know if I can take it

Because the butterflies remember the year I nearly made it.

So, I'm going

I don't need a ride 

I'll walk

The revolutions fire

Will rise with the cemetery's storm and dawn

I can get past the fear

I don't feel too harshly anymore

Since the day I walked through that lucky door

So why couldn't we be united

Take every menacing doorbell and footstep

Then fight it?

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

'So why couldn' t we be united'?

What a question. I'm sure that every relationship that ends must pause to reflect on the whys. There is plenty of rain in this poem. Tears for all the upsets. My mind wandered a great deal Colacat as I worked my way through your lines.

Chris

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you so much! I appreciate it endlessly and I’m so glad you enjoyed it. (:

[Chris Shaw]

You are welcome dear poet

[Betty Hermelee]

“ Home is where the heart is”…. But adventure is always welcome….I love your descriptions of home, the warmth, the memories, the lake and more. But the freedom to move to excite to learn to experience cannot be beaten… this poem give us a clear picture of home and the freedom to discover.
Lovely….
Best.
B.😊

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you so much! I appreciate the review endlessly (:

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I think this cruising is more of the mind than body...
as we reach a certain age...we start traveling backwards and maybe wish we had paid more attention to that which we glossed over the first time.
the lake part hit home for me....My ashes will be scattered in a lake up in Vermont ...one in which I swam when I was in my early age in the fifties.
j.

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you so much! I appreciate this review so, so much.

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

I so enjoy the journey you took me on with this poem. There is a sense of liberation and freedom to the words, but also a reminisced angst for the old place called home. It's like a 60's travel song the way you paint this journey Colacat. It has an emotional weight that is tempered by its letting go nostalgia. A wonderful poem indeed. I have come to expect no less from a talented writer like you.

[Vertigo Cat1111]

You seemed to have gotten this poem perfectly! Thank you so, so much. It means the world to me more than I can ever say.

[barleygirl]

I love your grungy realism that pops with imaginative details. I remember when everyone my age thought the ideal retirement would be cruising in an RV for the rest of our lives. Even living in a mobile home, the kind with a permanent foundation, is nothing like living in a structure. I lived in a mobile home one time & everything I owned stunk of formaldehyde (which is what's used to make all that fake s**t). Sorry I got off on an RV tangent. Good poetry does that to a person (((HUGS)))

[Sami Khalil]

Wow! I was drawn inpowerfully, to feel more with the narrator, to know more of this sad state, to experience more of this relationship. I hope the narrator or both have found closure and peace at the end of this tunnel.
You have a great style and way of conveying.

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you so, so much! I appreciate it endlessly and I’m so glad you liked it. (:

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome ColaCat...