Maternal Instincts

‘I get this feeling whenever I feel good, it’ll be the last time.’- Phoebe Bridgers

10/8/2021 3:32 AM

Meeting you was like blowing off old boxes
Things I’ve forgotten
Washing off painful bloody messes
And tangled up tired tresses
It was like walking through a long dark hall and not fearing, clowning, chained, crying poltergeists at all

I’ll say hi one more time then I’ll go to bed
I’ll say bye one more time then I’ll address my head
It’s throwing a grenade
And running away

I look for you in the spinning mirror room
It’s tilting and twisting but you’re all I need

You’re the tattoo on my fingers
The maple syrup that lingers
Cause I guess there’s no one I’d rather be lost in LA with
I’ll take the cherry black lipstick for now
It’s a different start
Time to take a bow
Just as peaceful as you seem
But I’m just young but feel old and I’m keen
Everyone’s got different stories

Guess why I couldn’t sleep?
I got rid of every picture cause I only wanted all of you

Your smile
Your brows
Your voice
Your thumbs up is so charming
My walls
And me are falling

Reviews

[Fabian G. Franklin]

A mind at battle with thoughts and dreams as warriors; a lovesick feeling that you can't shake, just waiting for the moment, the next moment. It's like Carly Simon sang, "Anticipation, it's keeping me waiting..." This has some great lines. I like "throwing a grenade and running away"; a little self-deprecation maybe? A little emotional sabotage? Sometimes nothing will do to satisfy but satisfaction itself. You nail down the feelings well with this evocative write. Very well done! F.

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you so much- you got this spot on, I appreciate the review so much. (:

[andrew mitchell]

Love never runs smooth. I look forward to the next chapter. We'll expressed and nicely scripted.

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you so much for the kind review. I appreciate it so much.

[M. J. Smith]

Okay, you little scallywag! This I didn't expect. Now that's sweet. Did he love reading it? Hope so.
Romantic, sweet, reminiscent of first love. Beautiful poem

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you so, so much for the kind review, I appreciate it so much as always. (:

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

Woww expressed superbly shows the deep feelings in a creative rhyming style. I was admiring the maple lingers and fingers stanza a lot. Hope he loves you back coz this shows how much you like him. Kudos!!

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you so much for the kind review. I appreciate it so, so much. (:

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and those walls are not easy to break down, I know that....have experienced it often enough...
not letting someone in who I know is right for me...
Passed up some relationships that could have last forever...but I had a thumbs down heart.
j.

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you so much for the wonderful review, I appreciate it endlessly. (: