I Can Give You It

I Can Give You It

I can give you it

The antenna that scrapes your

underbelly and grazes your sores

whenever you wish

for it to be

I can give you it

The preacher on the sand dunes  

waving you back to land 

from the hot air ballon 

you stole from me

Forgiving -- 

the molten air you 

blew into my lungs 

every time we kissed

I can give you it

The veins that speak like

tree branches and burrow into

your flesh and make your

limbs swell

I can give you it

The florescent orb 

stapled on a golden arch

that you wear on your finger

until the day you sell

Forgiving -- 

the holes in the clay

that morphed into what

we considered as "us"

I can give you it

the peace of mind

and everything else

that my walking shadow

serves 

I can give you it

The blueness of 

the day-sky and 

everything else that you

deserve

Author's Note

Reviews

[Edmund S. Obumba]

nice piece of work.
I like the way you keep the readerzoned out till the last paragraph where someone gets to know actually what its all about:-)
good job.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

I was kind of hoping for the title to be repeated again at the end....you use such broad vocab and the rythem is finely cut,the final paragraph was especially moving, good work Sir.

[Shmoke-Sifted Heftlande..]

I normally hate break-up type poems even more so than bad love poems, but I really like this.
Please everyone read that statement and the rest of this review carefully before responding to that, please.
there's a couple places where I wanted to make a wording suggestion but a voice in my head became quicksand and swallowed me and yelled 'shut up' into the world I could eventually no longer see and hear. There's too f*****g much right with this poem for all that, and even the thought of hypothetical perfection bores me to contrived tears.
The imagery is visually painful like a vw curb feeler against a median when you've already got a migraine and a toothache, while remaining beautiful, like the capturing of the experience through great cinematography
anyone who doesn't know how top shelf a compliment that is needs to go do some more drugs
well done...your latest poem will make more sense now and after I see the film

[Serenity Faith]

Beautiful Cole! My interpretation was unconditional love being given, marriage, a life of happiness after bein hurt. Maybe that's just me though...all the same, another great piece from you!

[Mockingbird]

sounds like someone who has been repeatedly hurt by someone he or she truly loves and will always be forgiving. so sad.

[Shmoke-Sifted Heftlander]

sad in which form of the definition?..I'm not being sarcastic, I'm genuinely curious as to the context and intent

[Mockingbird]

it's sad that they are being hurt. it's sad that they will always forgive the person who inflicts pain on them. it's sad because the person being hurt doesn't deserve it. the situation is sad. waiting is sad. it really is a sad poem.

[Shmoke-Sifted Heftlander]

but you don't think the beauty of it outweighs it like a t**d on a scale against a pimple? not that it's a contest..just a bad analogy of sorts

[Mockingbird]

sad for me is beautiful thus your poem is beautiful. i like how it's a direct, no-frills piece , it attracts me to it. it's a ten on any scale. it is thought-provoking in that it reminds me of a song, which has to be my favorite set of lyrics ever, "like a friend" by pulp where they are singing about a similar situation. i like the ambiguity in the last stanza where the person will get what they deserve though the person is not deserving but they will get the best anyway. such is his love. i like your depiction of this kind of relationship. it is accurate.

[Shmoke-Sifted Heftlander]

well said

[Lily Mae]

I love your creativity and you've done well with it here in this write also.. I really enjoyed it..xo

[Laura Maidah]

Great video. It's so immaterial that I lose focus because you're trying to contain a universe within one author. Nice instrumental. Cool video. Just downloaded it!

[Kayla]

Inspiring. :)

[Corset]

This was wonderful Cole, I actually like the quirky way you say "I can give it to you" but I can put a twist on it to make it a bit unlike anyone else. :)

[Dayran]

When we realize how wonderful some of our gifts are, we realize the true nature of loss others may have gone through. Great write Cole.