She is...

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She is…
A Poem by Colton Warr

I am saved,
As shock and electricity sizzle through my veins
A furious flow of a feeling so new to me
She is glowing like lights in the city

I am enamored,
As I look at her, butterflies prevent proper use of grammar
A star in the sky entrancing my gaze
She is the cause of all of my happy days

I am overwhelmed,
As I am abducted and taken to her realm
A different planet I am on, yet scared I am not
She is a creation in which beauty she is infinitely beyond

I am happy,
As simple as that may be, I am happy
A search thought to be lost, yet here I am found
She is a wild flower to which I am bound

She is a ray from the sun, never to be brought down
She is a queen with a diamond crown
She is a hurricane crashing into me
She is the clearest and most dazzling of waves from an endless sea
She is outer space and all things breath taking and unknown
She is perfect…I want to be the reason she will never be alone
She is a thief in the night, stealing my heart, perhaps
She is, she is…but I don’t want it back.

Reviews

[stars are far]

awww. thats very sweettttttttt..i love it.. to my library :)..well done

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much!! I'm glad you enjoyed it, thanks for adding it as well!

[realmwriter]

Well this certainly takes an interesting twist at the end. So full of love and adoration and then all of sudden, BAMM, Go To Hell. I don't want you, I don't need you. You tore out my smile and kicked it a mile. You stole my heart and took it apart. Piece by shattered piece, you laid bare my soul and left it bitter to the toll. A touch of your stain has set me to crying in vain. I would have done anything for you and now I'll do nothing. I'll not have you back, I'd rather lay upon the rack. I'll not utter your name, lest I play your foolish game.

Great write, inspiring as you see.

[realmwriter]

Maybe I got it wrong though.

[Colton Warr]

That wasn't exactly my intention but at the same time I don't believe you got it "wrong" per say. I believe one is supposed to interpret a piece how one sees fit. I want to be able to make you feel the same emotion that I feel, but at the same time make it transparent enough where you can feel what you want to feel when reading it as well. Although what you felt from it wasn't exactly what I was saying, that doesn't mean it isn't right. The way you took this poem is very interesting, it's all about interpretation and I appreciate you stopping by and saying what you said. Thank you!

[realmwriter]

It was that last line. As I read through the piece, all I felt was love and adoration. I felt that you where very happy with the person for whom this piece must be about. But then I came to the last line and in one fell swoop all of it was turned up, tossed aside. That last line throws me for a lop. But I think I get hat from my own experiences in my past.

Yes. poetry is meant to be interpreted however the reader feels. But I see know harm in knowing what the writers true intent was either. Please do tell.

[MandaBear]

this poem is amazing. Who ever this is for is one lucky girl :) I loved all of it :) Great write

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much!! I appreciate you stopping by and saying that! She is a lucky girl, or perhaps I am a lucky guy. I'm glad you enjoyed!

[Coyote Poetry]

"She is a thief in the night, stealing my heart, perhaps
She is, she is…but I don’t want it back."
Wow. The poem is amazing. I like the positive feel and energy of hope and happiness. The good flow of thoughts led to the perfect ending. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Colton Warr]

Thanks very much!! I am glad you were able to feel everything that I felt when I wrote this. I am glad you enjoyed it! Thanks again.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Chris]

"She is outer space and all things breathe taking and unknown "- breathe or breath?

The ties that bind... define us.

[Colton Warr]

I could not agree more Chris, thanks so much for stopping by and commenting. I appreciate it! Good catch on the "breathe or breath" thing. Sometimes you gaze upon your work for so long while proof reading that it all starts to blend together. Thanks again!

[If The Schue Fits]

Last stanza had me in the feels. Quality work my friend

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much, I appreciate you stopping by and commenting. Glad I had you in the feels because lord knows I was when I penned this. Thanks again

[Connor Jarvis]

Im not a sappy kind of writer but I enjoyed this poem and felt what you were putting out. Great poetry

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much! I appreciate you reaching out and saying that, it means a lot.

[Fenix Flight]

A Spectacular Tribute to someone loved. This shows just how much you cherish and treasure her. Well done! its beautiful, it brought a tear to my eye. :') Thank you for sharing this. Its simply amazing!!!!!!

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much! I appreciate the kind words. My heart wrote this, I truly believe that. Thank you for recognizing that. Thanks again for commenting! :)