Devil On My Shoulder/Winters Interlude

Devil On My Shoulder/Winters Interlude

A Poem by Colton Warr
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Sometimes we go through "Winters" in our lives...

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Devil on my Shoulder
A Poem by Colton Warr

You should set her free
Unleash her to this world without you
To you, heartbreak is nothing new 
I beg of you, I plea 

Unshackle her from your chains
What are you trying to prove?
She is something you can afford to lose
I promise, it won't feel like a million pains

Let the winter make you cold 
Pull the trigger, be bold 
You will find a new hand to hold
One whose hair and heart will be gold 

Escape this mirage 
Your emotions a messy collage 
Temptation a bearing barrage 

Give in to me, please 
I can make it a breeze 

Again I say, you should set her free

   *****

Winters Interlude
A Poem by Colton Warr 

My heart burns with your desire
A fireplace melting the night for our love
Your voice sounds of a thousand Angels in a choir
You, my love, I put nothing above

Even though we are apart, I can feel your heat 
Saving me from this brutal winter 
Lay your head on my heartbeat 
Watch how fast I can become a sinner

I can still smell the aroma of your flame 
Blazing out of control 
You are something that cannot be tame
Would you please burn down my soul 

But what if this flame of ours goes out? 
What if the cold returns? 
All of our heat doused 
And what if I see her...

Don't let the winter make you cold 
But what if my eyes go astray? 
And I see her green and gold 
Would she be enough to take me away? 

I would then be graced with a different heat
You cast aside and sold 
You without a heartbeat 
I am warm and you are cold 

© 2015 Colton Warr


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I wondered at first why these two poems were placed here together but I think they are two sides of the same coin. They could be separate, but they could also be all one, in a sense. Their coupling together works too well though, I think, for them to be completely separated.
I recognise in both pieces something of myself, and when taken together that identification is even stronger. It takes thought and feeling, an objective introspection to observe the complexities of one's own character, and the regretful negatives that arise from experience. In essence, an honest appraisal of the shortcomings of human nature. It's relatively rare, I think, to come across a wisdom and honesty from the male perspective (possibly because it is so often perceived as dislikeable - particularly by women).
I believe the greatest strength in writing is a sense of reality, and seeing things for what they are (there is wisdom in acceptance). But also, being able to do this with meaning and depth poetically reinforces that strength. However imperfectly. I think you achieved that here.


Posted 8 Years Ago


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Colton Warr

8 Years Ago

Well thank you very much! I spent many nights trying to decide whether I wanted these two to be two .. read more



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Winter can exist intrinsically and extrinsically...excellent piece.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Colton Warr

9 Years Ago

Exactly, well said! Thanks for giving this a read! I'm glad you liked it!
Steve L.

9 Years Ago

My pleasure!
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dan
Colton, I can say the same thing about both of these tied-together poems. Your basic idea for each are good ones, good starting points and trajectories for poems. I mean this in a constructive way when I tell you that, at some points, you seem to be straining for rhymes instead of capturing the free flow of what's in your heart. Now, how do I know this? It's because I tend to do the same things myself at times. Maybe you should try what I do? After I finish a write I look it over really well. Sometimes the best course is to be willing to abandon the plan to rhyme and write it free verse style. Both these poems have all the makings of excellent writes, they just need to ebb and flow more naturally. I hope you're not offended by my suggestion; like I said, I'm prone to the same things. Keep writing! take care...dan

Posted 9 Years Ago


Colton Warr

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much Dan, I do appreciate the constructive criticism! You actually may be spot on her.. read more
dan

9 Years Ago

It's my pleasure. I'm looking forward to reading more of your work. take care...dan
Beautiful! I love winters because the cold outside make me feel what I am inside.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Colton Warr

9 Years Ago

Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed! Thank you for reading!
Beautiful!
Absolutely beautiful!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Colton Warr

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much Ashley Marie!! I'm glad you liked this! Thanks for reading!
ashleymarie

9 Years Ago

No problem!
And I did...I really enjoyed it!!
Keep it up!
Both of these poems are beautifully written, and they certainly generate a perfect atmosphere. Great work :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Colton Warr

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much, my friend! Thanks for giving this a read! I'm happy you enjoyed them!
I really enjoyed both of these poems these lines stood out for me "My heart burns with your desire
A fireplace melting the night for our love
Your voice sounds of a thousand Angels in a choir
You, my love, I put nothing above" they were so beautifully written. Great Job


Posted 9 Years Ago


Colton Warr

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much Warren! I'm so glad that you enjoyed this! Your words mean a lot! Thanks for sto.. read more
Beautiful work Colton! I really enjoyed the flow of the poems and the rhyme schemes you used. I love creative rhyming as it is just that much more of a challenge to write a great piece. You have done an awesome job!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Colton Warr

9 Years Ago

Thank you so much Aaron!! Thank you for the kind words, I'm happy you enjoyed this! Thanks for readi.. read more
I love this. I can feel emotion spilling from these words onto the audience

Posted 9 Years Ago


Colton Warr

9 Years Ago

Thank you so much Isabella! I'm glad you enjoyed this one! Thanks for reading!
The two pieces are dichotomous wonders, such extreme ends of the emotional realities are being painted here side by side, its really beautiful, what you have created here. cheers

Posted 9 Years Ago


Colton Warr

9 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Roshan! I appreciate the kind words and I appreciateyoutaking the time out to rea.. read more
both of the poems are stellear! Man you write some good stuff.
This is raelly good and full of emotions, I love the flow and rhyming of the poem

Posted 9 Years Ago


Colton Warr

9 Years Ago

Thank you so much Lizardo!! Thanks for the kind words, my friend! I'm glad you enjoyed this! Thanks .. read more
Lizardo

9 Years Ago

You're welcome!

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Added on February 17, 2015
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Tags: Love, Poetry, Winter, Snow, Cold, Heart, Warmth, Kiss, Beauty, Devil, Heartbreak, Temptation

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Colton Warr

Morgantown, WV



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