Devil On My Shoulder/Winters Interlude

Devil On My Shoulder/Winters Interlude

A Poem by Colton Warr
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Sometimes we go through "Winters" in our lives...

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Devil on my Shoulder
A Poem by Colton Warr

You should set her free
Unleash her to this world without you
To you, heartbreak is nothing new 
I beg of you, I plea 

Unshackle her from your chains
What are you trying to prove?
She is something you can afford to lose
I promise, it won't feel like a million pains

Let the winter make you cold 
Pull the trigger, be bold 
You will find a new hand to hold
One whose hair and heart will be gold 

Escape this mirage 
Your emotions a messy collage 
Temptation a bearing barrage 

Give in to me, please 
I can make it a breeze 

Again I say, you should set her free

   *****

Winters Interlude
A Poem by Colton Warr 

My heart burns with your desire
A fireplace melting the night for our love
Your voice sounds of a thousand Angels in a choir
You, my love, I put nothing above

Even though we are apart, I can feel your heat 
Saving me from this brutal winter 
Lay your head on my heartbeat 
Watch how fast I can become a sinner

I can still smell the aroma of your flame 
Blazing out of control 
You are something that cannot be tame
Would you please burn down my soul 

But what if this flame of ours goes out? 
What if the cold returns? 
All of our heat doused 
And what if I see her...

Don't let the winter make you cold 
But what if my eyes go astray? 
And I see her green and gold 
Would she be enough to take me away? 

I would then be graced with a different heat
You cast aside and sold 
You without a heartbeat 
I am warm and you are cold 

© 2015 Colton Warr


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I wondered at first why these two poems were placed here together but I think they are two sides of the same coin. They could be separate, but they could also be all one, in a sense. Their coupling together works too well though, I think, for them to be completely separated.
I recognise in both pieces something of myself, and when taken together that identification is even stronger. It takes thought and feeling, an objective introspection to observe the complexities of one's own character, and the regretful negatives that arise from experience. In essence, an honest appraisal of the shortcomings of human nature. It's relatively rare, I think, to come across a wisdom and honesty from the male perspective (possibly because it is so often perceived as dislikeable - particularly by women).
I believe the greatest strength in writing is a sense of reality, and seeing things for what they are (there is wisdom in acceptance). But also, being able to do this with meaning and depth poetically reinforces that strength. However imperfectly. I think you achieved that here.


Posted 8 Years Ago


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Colton Warr

8 Years Ago

Well thank you very much! I spent many nights trying to decide whether I wanted these two to be two .. read more



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Posted 9 Years Ago


Colton Warr

9 Years Ago

Very cool! Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed this so much and I thank you for placing me at se.. read more
I really like both of them :) Great job! Would you mind reviewing my new poem "Good Mourning/Good Morning". Thanks.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Colton Warr

9 Years Ago

Thank you so much Kelsey! I appreciate the kind words! I'm glad you enjoyed it! I'll check out your .. read more
good.i like it.thanks. two poems fine...

Posted 9 Years Ago


Colton Warr

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much! Thanks for stopping by and giving this a read! I'm glad you liked it!
A very vivid and strong poem. I will look forward to reading the rest of your work.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Colton Warr

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much! I appreciate the kind words! I would very much appreciate you checking out some.. read more
A very powerful poem, full of strong emotion and imagery. Strong voice and passion.
I really enjoyed it.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Colton Warr

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much! I'm glad you enjoyed this one! Thanks for reading!
Tina Kline

9 Years Ago

You are welcome.
Absolutely brilliant. Love your style....its just....jar :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Colton Warr

9 Years Ago

Thank you so much Ana B! Thanks for the kind words! Jar, I love that! Glad you enjoyed!
Ana B.

9 Years Ago

Anytime, i love good poetry and yours is amongst that :)
This is a beautiful write thank you for sharing it was so strong and true a pleasure to read
Broken girl

Posted 9 Years Ago


Colton Warr

9 Years Ago

Thank you Broken Girl! I'm glad you liked this piece! Thanks for stopping by and giving this a read!.. read more
A strong and honest poem, letting go is the bravest thing we can do.
some criticism that I hope you will find constructive: Be careful of slipping into old fashioned language, you want to carve out your own poetic voice not recreate the classics. I try to avoid using numerical values in poetry eg. 'a million pains' try find a descriptive way of conveying that value eg. 'a sea of pains' although obviously thats a tired and cliched example. If you're using a rhyme scheme I would keep it consistent or only use it in specific places for dramatic emphasis, or to highlight a crux in the poem. try to avoid sli;ping in and out of rhyme arbitrarily. good poem all round though, i enjoyed a lot of the imagery in it :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Colton Warr

9 Years Ago

Thank you so William Arthur! I appreciate the Criticism, that's how we get better. I will take what .. read more
Great imagery. You really pulled me into the poem. I felt that I could see in my head rather clearly what was happening in the poem. Thanks for sharing!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Colton Warr

9 Years Ago

Thank you so much! Thanks for stopping by and giving this a read! Thanks for reading!
I loved it Colton!
The imagery, the beauty, the emotions...
Well done!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Colton Warr

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much! I'm glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for reading!

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Morgantown, WV



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