Danger Lerks

This is my first attempt at writing a horror poem

In the dead of night
You toss and turn
Hoping you will crash and burn.
But no matter how hard you try
You still continue to lie
wide awake in your bed,
Staring at the ceiling.
All of a sudden,
You have a creepy feeling.
You feel that something isn't right
and it scares you especially in the dead of night.
There's no lights on
everything is pitch black.
You wish you could get your warmth back.
But as you lie there, the feeling increases
the fear runs through you and you grab the creases of your sheets.
No matter what you try to do
This fear isn't escaping you.
Then you almost cry out
for what was that sound?
It sounded like a man's boot
walking on the ground.
Ever so slowly, ever so surely
Ever so deliberately.
One step
Then another.
You try to hide beneath your covers.
But then, did you imagine it?
Was it in your head after all?
Yes, you try to think
but you feel like your downfall is ever slowly approaching.
Then you hear again, in the pitch black around you.
You feel fear and terror
as more darkness surrounds you.
Maybe if I turn on a light, you think,
this will all go away.
So you tiptoe, noiselessly and reach to the light switch near the doorway.
But try as you might, it won't turn on.
For the lights stopped working
Now your fear is strong.
Then all of a sudden,
your breath runs cold,
for standing in the corner,
behold, behold!
Tis the shaddow of a man,
and his intentions don't look good
He's not behaving like a normal man should.
Then on the wall before you,
You want to scream at the sight.
For smeered in blood is your name in the dead of night.
You are frozen in terror as you see the man move closer.
Then the sound of metal
you almost scream with horror.
But is this all a dream, you hope.
Am I going bananas?
But then the hair on your neck stands on end
As the man approaches you, daggar in hand
Then whispers softly
It's time to meet your fate, Staceyanna.

Author's Note

Thanks so much for reading. I usually don't write horror poems, mostly it's horror stories. But I figured I would give this a shot. Please let me know what you think. And of course, any grammar of misspelling if you notice them. Thanks much.

Cheers,

Staceyanna

Reviews

[Jennie Baron]

This is a very suspenseful, creepy, scary write indeed.

A few spelling errors:
lerks should be lurks
shaddow s/b shadow
smeered s/b smeared
daggar s/b dagger

But of course those are small things and easily corrected and overall, and this is very good especially for a first attempt at a horror poem. Very well done!

[Stacey]

Wow thank you so much for taking the time to read/review. Also thanks for bringing the spelling errors to my attention. Interesting about shadow, I thought it was with 2 D's. Guess not though. Anyway, thanks again.

[Dave]

Staceyanna,

Like you, I was cringing in fear. You seem to have a talent for the macabre.

[Stacey]

Thanks smiles. Horror is my favorite genre. I used to go by the name Staceyanna, when I first joined, but it was just too long a name, so decided on a first, middle, and last, so Stacey Angela Paulson it is. Smiles. Thanks so much for reading.

Stacey

[Archos]

This gave me shivers, no kidding! I loved it!

[Stacey]

Smiles, horror is my favorite genre. Thanks so much for reading.

[Archos]

Thanks for giving me a chance to read it :)

[Stacey]

You're welcome. :)

[An owl on the moon]

You paint the world in such dark, gripping colors... drawing us into your mind.. the fear in your soul... the coming end... Powerfully moving...

[Stacey]

Well thank u so much for your time and review. I appreciate it.

Stacey

[Kate Henderson]

Great visual horror imagery, I enjoyed this piece. Fantastic work! :)

[Stacey]

Thanks so much for taking the time to read and review. I really appreciate it. Just to let you know I'm going back to my old pseudonym because it fits better. I'll write more about that later, but just to let you know. Again, thanks for reading.

Stacey

[Kate Henderson]

You're welcome :)

[Symphonic_Sunflowers]

I loved this, alot.

I liked how it had a bit of a rhythmn, and I liked the end ''Its time to meet your fate, staceyanna''
This was really good and im glad that Jack Kennedy requested this to me!

Yours, Chloe

[Stacey]

Thanks much Chloe. I appreciate the time and review. I try the best I can to write and not stress too much because writing is an excellent way to put your thoughts out there. Thanks again.

[Symphonic_Sunflowers]

i absolutely agree, youre welcome :3

[Spaceman26]

Woooo, that's creepy. Especially "the shadow of a man" part. I don't think I'll get any sleep tonight lol. Why do I read all of these creepy poems and stories? LOL. Well wrote though.

[Stacey]

Well if you think that's creepy, go read my horror story. It's a lot creepier. Lol. Thanks so much for reading/reviewing.

[Jack Kennedy]

Ahh great poem! Very creep and build suspense very well!

[Stacey]

Thanks. :) Horror is my favorite genre.

[Ellen Randall]

Wow I really felt caught up in the suspense, certainly resonates with some thoughts I have late at night when everyone has gone to bed and you hear something rattling! Great work x

[Stacey]

Thanks so much Ellen. Horror is my favorite genre. The gorier, the better. I posted a horror story last night. It's definitely scarier if you want to check it out. It's called The Mystery Behind The Blood Stained Money. It's about a private investigator. Won't get too detailed because I don't wanna give it away, but it's definitely horror, and a lot scarier than my poem. :) Anyways, thanks so much for the review.

Cheers,

Staceyanna

[Sha-Tisha Avonlady Bonh..]

wow scary but it was really good

[Stacey]

Thanks so much for reading. I just posted a horror story for the creativity contest. It's for everyone to read though as well. It's called The Mystery Behind The Blood Stained Money. Pretty gory though. I'm going to post in my journal later as well. Anyway, thanks so much for the review.

Cheers,

Staceyanna