new and shiny

In our youth 

we sat on hills 

Staring down at life

all the was shiny and new

The lies that were taught to us 

sticking to our lips, tongue and fingers  

Smoking in half truths and coughing over the fumes 

The world version of the so called "Good Life" 

Too old to fake it 

To young to care 

we owned that spot of the earth 

flying our flags high and unapologetic

we stepped on crumbles plans  

and bruised dreams 

we lit life to the fullest and 

threw the butts on the ground  

only vaguely aware of these decisions 

would effect tomorrows realities. 

Reviews

[terry smith]

every generation feels it is the lost generation and will be the last,and on and on it goes....till the sun swells and swallows us all. Nice poem :)

[Mara]

Excellent write!
Looking forward to hearing more :)

[Emily]

I like your wording a lot!
Keep it up!

[AaronFreitas]

It's a really good write. Amazing how much different youth of today, my youth and my parents youth is so much different. Expressed very well :)

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmingham]

Right? I am not to far removed form youth today and yet sometimes it feels like i might as well be 100 years old in comparison.

[dan]

Crystal, I'm floored. I really don't like to quote lines from the things I review, but I really wanted to with this piece. But I quickly realized I'd be quoting half the lines, dissecting every line and idea. I can't do that to anyone's work, it would seem almost vulgar. This piece is not for dissection or in-depth analysis. This must be read and absorbed as a whole entity viewed holistically. Viewing life from high vantage points,, coming to conclusions when the observation dictates that revisions mush be calibrated into the equation...a reassessment carelfully filtered through the glass prism of what may or may not be real. That's a hell of a meaning...film to be shown on the side wall of a mountain, a drove-in experience in color. And in HD. Great write! take care...dan

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmingham]

Well I am floored by your great review! thank you. Some times i really feel like a story takes my hand and write its self out and I am left wondering what just happened. This is one of those. Thank you so much for you kind words and i hope your wife is feeling better!

[dan]

It's going to take some time but she should get back to 100% soon, thank you for your kind words and warm wishes. take care...dan

[Robert]

Youth so different, so true. Looking back, always. We learn so much in youth but sometimes dont know until later in life. Well done Crystal and using the references of smoking, original.

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmingham]

thank you!