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In truth I don't really like rhyming poetry, but this is about my husband and he brings out the hopeless romantic in me.

If I with eyes unwept 
on you before laid sight 
could mine eyes be 
washed clean enough 
to view you in true light? 

And what if you captured 
mine heart before the start 
would I, Nay, could I allow 
you the conquerors part 
or should I without the grife
I've know pass you by 
blind to the love you've shown 

And if my past is but a start 
and you, my love, the finish  
Than I, My past, give heaven thanks 
and would not one memory diminish

Reviews

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

I don't like writing or reading rhyming poetry usually either. But I do enjoy it when it's well done. This was executed flawlessly. No redundancies whatsoever, no alterations of true meaning behind it. It's a success. Likewise, I like how it feels olden; I feel immersed into the middle ages and courtship love.

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmingham]

Thank you. Yeah, My hubby is my soft place to land in so many ways. I usually don't like to rhyme as all, i feel like it is constricting and limiting. I don't think you feel in perfect couplets and it feel unnatural to me. But what can i say this one just wrote itself. I read it to him at our wedding. its special to me because its end of one part of my life and the new chapter to a brighter future. Thank you for the review

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

Aww what a sweet story behind the beautiful work! He must have been so touched when you read it!

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmingham]

yeah he cried like a little girl ;)

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

hahaha that's the idea!