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You ball up words like fists 

and bloody my ears and nose 

I stagger 

I stumble 

Under the weight 

of your sentences 

your yells 

your screams 

quick to anger 

quicker to beg forgiveness 

which i dole out like candy.  

Reviews

[closed]

this poem makes me think of an event that escalates so quickly that it is over before it even begins
i think this was your intent


if so it's like a literary train collision...
that is prevented before it ever occurs


inventive write


-Dream

[Robert]

Flows very well Crystal. I can remember bad things people said to me over the years that hurt, more than many good times I had. It just seems to linger. You wrote this well.

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmingham]

Thank You Robert

[Suzy Hazelwood]

Words can be powerful enough to feel like a physical assault, even in the mind. I like the way you've ended this, it shows that forgiveness seems easy to dole out - and perhaps too easily and not always the best option. I have my limits on forgiveness! Very hard hitting writing, and a situation many are continually living with.

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmingham]

Thank you Suzy. Yeah I would rather be hit than yelled out personally. bruise heals, but words can leave a scar that never heals

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an all-out brawl with words... they hurt and they heal but they always leave us marked... well-written and heart-wrenching at the same time...

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmingham]

Thank you. I liked what you said about they hurt and heal but always leave us marked... i dig it

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You're welcome...

[Mara]

I like this piece, its short but full of meaning
Thanks for sharing, Great Job:)

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmingham]

Thank you!

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

That is very heart-wrenching. Very relatable too. It happens even with people who do not usually argue like this, but it is heartbreaking when there is a perpetual pattern. One is always easily angered and does something very hurtful on impulse and then begs for forgiveness. The other always forgives. And then they execute the patterns by default.

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmingham]

Thank you, this was a particularly hard one to share, the power of words drop bombs and heal. What you say is important and what you allow to be said around you and to you is very important.

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

I can imagine...words spatter effortlessly at times of heightened emotions, but words cannot be taken back. Though we forgive, lingering wounds remain.