Waking up in the dark

Just a little short story I wrote about a man who wakes up in the dark with no memory of how he got there. Enjoy.

My eyes flew open. I stared into the shadows of the tree's. I stood up. My breath misted before me which only intensified my already fast beating heart-beat. A twig cracked from behind me. Quickly I dropped to the ground as silently as I could, trying hard not to be seen by whatever was out there, if anything was out there. I thought back to Jenny. She would be wondering where I am, as I hadn't returned home like I said I would. The truth is, I don't know why I'm here. I remember nothing. The last thought I remeber having was how long it would take me to get home. Now I have no idea where I am. I listened to the air around me. Nothing. It was then I suddenly became aware of my body. It was wet. I was freezing cold standing in my £1000 work suit that was soaking wet, and I was all alone. Alone. How painful that word sounded as it ran round my head again and again. I lay there. I couldn't move, I was paralysed with fright. Another twig cracked. I curled into the feutal position and tried to relax and be calm. Crack. Another twig. What was near me, what was around? I stiffened. I heard breathing, heavy panting breathing. I was very scared. I felt something warm seeping into my trousers. I whimpered. Then it got a lot closer to me and it breath was on my face. I squinted through my eyes and saw something glitter. A knife. I let out a blood-curdling scream just before the knife reached it's target. The knife continued to hack at my skin, but I still wouldn't die. I lay in pain. Screaming and screaming as each knife slice split my skin. Then It stopped. I heard the thing walk away and I lay there bleeding. Desperate I moaned for help but I felt myself getting weaker. Then I died.

Author's Note

If there are any spelling mistakes just let me know and I'll fix it right up. :)

Reviews

[Holly O'Brien]

oh my...poor guy...this short story raises many questions...it also confused me at one point...for instance...when he got on the ground after hearing a strange noise and then a while later he was standing soaked in his expensive suit. ..maybe it was the point...or maybe it was a mistake....

I liked the scenario very much...this kind of thing makes you want to know more more more lol....

would you ever continue this? It would definitely be interesting!! I certainly enjoyed it!

[KristenMaye]

very brief but it kept you on your toes. You may want to try sing more decriptive language instead of repeating the word "knife"

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this is really really good.
keep writing

[Angel Veselinov]

Nice Read thanks for sharing :) keep writing it is good :)