What It's Like (To Fall)

These burgeoning emotions that fill me

seem ready to burst out of my chest.

   The lust that's always present

   now directed at you.

      The loneliness even more poignant

      because I want you near me.

         The pain of my life overwhelming,

         like mortar in the walls between us.

            The sadness blackening all the words

            I wish I could say, and the ones you do.

               The ____ I have never voiced,

               yet I feel my heart screaming it.

            This cacophony of emotions and potent fear

            make my thoughts run, and soon my body will follow.

         ...I hesitate; if I run, you would just find another,

         but I would never get to know what it's like.

      What it's like to have lust, loneliness, pain, sadness, and ____

      washed clean of all the ache, anxiety, hurt, tears, and longing.

   But I'm used to those things, and so

   why do I constantly think of you?

I struggle with why your touch is not repulsive,

and why the traits I dislike are fading from focus.

Is this torrent of pain and self-loathing,

What it's like to fall in ____?

Author's Note

This is brand new~, so I could really use some critiques.

Reviews

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

You have such a lovely,honest voice @pale rose.I hope your honesty in your words is always retained for that makes your writing much authentic.

[...and some ideas.]

if i go along with the context, it is not a bad fall :),
i mean, falling down could be much worse...or maybe you ment that it stays lovely and empowering...

[Chirpy!]

Wow. That was so beautiful and real! I loved the form of it, too. Like an arrow of emotion! *-* And, of course, every line so...balanced. You can go to any line and it can stand alone and still make sense!