Shifting Sands Inside This Hour Glass

Shifting Sands Inside This Hour Glass

A Poem by DCT ponderings

Grains of Sand

This mountain I climb

Is a glass house

Time fades away

The hours pass swiftly

I’m drowning

Pockets full of rocks

© 2013 DCT ponderings


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Very interesting. I feel the helplessness and the erosion of those elements . I also feel like your senses are drowning in life's difficulties...Splendid...:)

Posted 7 Years Ago


DCT ponderings

7 Years Ago

Thanks Sami- This one is a bit of an evolutionary work. After Sarah's review I have been attempting .. read more
Sami Khalil

7 Years Ago

Wow. Good to know . you are welcome...Bravo
There is no harder job that trying to climb a sand hill. Enormous effort to gain little headway, always feeling like you are weighed down by those rocks, perfect metaphor to describe a difficult time in one's life.

Posted 7 Years Ago


DCT ponderings

7 Years Ago

Thanks Keith. You describe what I was after very well. I think Sarah was right in saying this one co.. read more
sad write, but well written, cool little piece

Posted 7 Years Ago


DCT ponderings

7 Years Ago

Thanks again for reading and reviewing.
Interesting idea...in such a concise piece, the images are all seemingly unrelated, but somehow they end up making sense in an unusual way. You have the sand turning to a mountain within a glass house in which you are drowning with pockets full of rocks...there is a definite sense of desperation in the words, which was quite nice. I do think this would be absolutely fabulous if you delved a little deeper into the idea and made it a little longer, but as is, I still enjoyed it.

Posted 7 Years Ago


DCT ponderings

7 Years Ago

It definitely needs expansion. You are right. I actually see someone caught inside the hour glass, t.. read more

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