An Adult (Like Me)

Think like an adult, act like a child.

Marvel as the son of sweat toil to ruins
Like a roach house-arresting for a living.
Attend to his heart of corrupted maturity
Like an old oak not knowing how to die.

(Oh yes, he wishes to be a lark
     and an owl at the same time and season.
For some reasons, a chair
     and the new silver screen lure him to be.
With a bunch bunch of sighs but nor remorse,
Still he chooses to put off a needed talk with himself.)

(And yes, he never plays in
     and with the rain anymore.
He is distortedly content of attesting
     its power behind a glass window.
With shadowed eyes and trembling legs,
Still he remains unmoved, believing it is what is fitting.)
   

Author's Note

I look around and I see a lot of adults like this. It's really sad.

Reviews

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Every individual has his own reason why he chooses to be what he like. No two individuals are the same. We should not compare our strengths with somebody. It's good for someone who conquers all, and worse for somebody who cannot survive.

We have different levels of thinking. Good for those who are wise enough, worse for those who need more guidance. But you see...they need more guidance, not conviction.
You're right, we must think like an adult with the full wisdom we acquired through continuous learning...from what we have seen, we heard, and we experienced.

It is good that we act like a child...innocent and worry-free. But then again, it depends on the level of understanding of an individual.

It's really sad on a strong man's part to see adults like it (you mentioned). But who we are to criticize? Each has own battle to fight. We do not know how each one suffers from it...unless we have that empathy.

My friend, this is a world of complex things. Even I don't understand some things around me. But I have this belief that no one owns my life but God and He lent that to me. So I am the one responsible for my own life. If I have done something wrong and it cursed myself, then no one should be blamed but me. But then, does this mean anyone has the right to blame me?

Day's eye...your piece is amazing...and your name is quite interesting. I like it. It sounds like mine (Dhaye), isn't it? It's a coincidence that I have this "ear" and you have that "eye". Lol. I can't live without a joke. That's me.

I can feel that you are that intelligent person, like those whom I know here in WC. I am glad that a fellow Filipino writer has this wisdom like yours. You must befriend Sir Joe and Ms. Belle, my admired writers here. You will notice the similarities of your works. I'm sure you will enjoy reading their works, too.

I hope to read more of your works, my eye...I mean Day's eye. Keep it up!

[The Daisy]

Who we are to criticize when haven't any idea what they have struggled upon? You're right. Compassion doesn't come in handy these days. However, aren't we the pilots of our own planes? We can't always delve into the past and shove it to people's faces just to justify who we have become. We, people should refuse and retaliate against the control of a horrendous history. I am fully aware of Sigmund Freud's Psychoanalysis but I bet he had somehow underestimated the 'freewill' of people. We always have potency to choose.

[The Daisy]

Oh and yes Dhaye, I have befriended them already. Got to review their works. Thank you so much. :)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

You will love their works. Enjoy!

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

I also suggest you befriend blackjaye. She has the same style of writing with those I mentioned. I would say, they are the best three writers who can examine a poem internally.

[Nirego]

Sometimes we are guilty of not seeing the faults in ourselves thus to have them pointed out to us is the only possible external force that can assist us in changing - for only we have the power to change ourselves. Blame is indeed a more complex matter, with differing degrees and targets under different circumstances

[SyberRose]

Enjoyed reading...nicely penned D.E...Rose:)

[Baby Ricochet]

"Like a roach house_arresting for a living" Great line.

[Peter H]

good write my friend keep up the good work :)

[Nirego]

I really like this - it's a great stab at the mature mentality and sometimes it does us a lot of good to act like a child and go and play in the rain!

There looks to be a couple of typos though, e.g. "but nor remorse". The only line I had problems with to begin is the second, reading it as "like a roach-house - arresting for a living" as opposed to the way it looks like it should be, more like "Like a roach - house-arresting for a living" - so perhaps you could consider a hyphen like I have used, or perhaps a colon; unless I have it all wrong of course...

[The Daisy]

Oh yes, you're right. It's actually "but NOT remorse". And sure, I'll adopt the hyphen.

read moreOh yes, you're right. It's actually "but NOT remorse". And sure, I'll adopt the hyphen.

Truly your reviews are constructive, Niallgimino. I am sure to learn from them all. You're lovely.