Disconnection

A solider's wife's worse nightmare when getting a phone call.

You use to call me everyday

To tell me you were safe

You asked me about the kids

And I said that they were okay

I asked you how you were

And you said things could be worse

I said I loved you and then hung up,

Everyday I sat by the phone

Waiting for you to call me,

Never expecting the worse

The phone finally rings as I dash to it

Saying hello

I listen carefully as the man explains to me,

He says I'm sorry mam but he got a bullet to the chest saving his friend

Silence entered the phone

All I could hear was the dial tone

I hung up in disbelief

And I disconnected myself

A knock at the door started me

As a man with a flag said to me

I'm sorry for your loss is there anything we can do?

I said yes please help me,

Because I don't know what to do

A sudden pain stricken me

As I think about being disconnected from him

It is the worse feeling ever,

I pull out his good suit

To find a letter in the pocket

That said I love you and we will never disconnect,

A necklace of a phone expresses the love we shared,

Realizing we can never have a disconnection

Author's Note

I hope you like it. Don't ask why I made it slanted I really don't know why. Thanks for the reviews!

Reviews

[Chris]

Ta'Sha,

The author chooses how to build the cohesive tension... for you slanting worked.
I've been there as doors were opened to answer knocks and rings - on both sides. Loss is deeply shocking and harrowing. Deeply horrified and total grief to absolute numbness - quite a gamut to work with AND have to live with. I think you caught the gut feel of being left behind... You never understand it... just do your best to survive it.

Take care,
Chris

[Michael of Gilead]

This is very nice, sad, sweet, sorrowful.....

[Seashell]

This is soooo moving and one can only wonder and fear such a call...that is why we should always say 'I love you' as much as possible where fitting....cos we never know...it could be the last time.
Emotional piece but reassuring too.
Thanks so much for share
Babsie xx

[AndyJCash]

I like the topics you write about, always varying and new, this being no exception.

[Kenneth The Poet]

Brilliant. Just brilliant.

[alexlessah]

Very very nice and deep. Good job!

[Lily Mae]

I like the structure and the write..you've outdone yourself.. :) xx

[biggerthenu]

this is really good your growing i see with structure and color very touching great ending and this story is very true we must be prepared for situation like this so you may never be disconnected from your family

[Writing with Kae]

I like this poem It's really good

[Sleeping Maiden]

Wow. This is so deep. Reading this made me so sad. But I love this poem! Beautiful write! A love that is in the military is hard.. we, girls, always would be anxious and worry never ceases to leave our minds. This piece shows how well that is portrayed. I love this piece! It also shows how powerful love can be even when a person is gone, that hold will always be there..