Forsaken

Forsaken

A Poem by Daniel Gardner
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All most out of emotions...

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Why have you done this?
Why have you left me?
You told me you never would.
You told me you understood.

How could you leave me?
How could you betray me?
You told everyone you would not go astray.
You told everyone you would be here till your dying day.

Why am I your martyr?
Why do you continue to run farther?
You told me I was not like the rest.
You told me I was the best.

Why have you lied?
Why have you made me cry?
You made me a fool.
You made me your tool.

Why did you do this?
Why have you put me to the test?
You made me your final test.
You killed me, just like the rest.

© 2010 Daniel Gardner


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aw. I don't like this one as much as the 'rage' one but it's still good. yupp im lazy, not even bothering to capatilize; oh what a shame, and not punctuating and spelling correctly? i dunno, awesome poem dude.

Posted 10 Years Ago


I like this, but the last stanza is kind of disruptive to the flow of it. Everything else is fine, but the very last two lines are iffy.

Posted 10 Years Ago


it seems like you were very broken. that mustve been hard to face that. i think everyone experiences this one day or another. the best thihg you can do is move on. it was a very reaching poem. very sweet.

Posted 10 Years Ago


I thought this was a very good poem. I really like it. Thanks for sharing. :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


very emotion poem on this. I understand how you feel.

Posted 10 Years Ago


I loved this! I can totally relate to it in my own way. I love your writing. Nice format and it flowed well. Keep it up! :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


This is amazing!
I really enjoyed this one alot.
Feelings are very well expressed.

100/100

Posted 10 Years Ago


Nice piece that fills the reader with tension! xx

Posted 10 Years Ago


A powerful write. The emotions are so raw and honest, which really adds on to the beauty of this piece. Nice job!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Know the feeling man, and it's not a situation I'd wish on anyone. The poem really conveys the emotion well, like I actually feel betrayed after reading it. Very good job, keep up the good work!

Posted 10 Years Ago



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Daniel Gardner
Daniel Gardner

Monroe, GA



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