This End

Find my past and the guns that went with it,

only if your passage is ever permitted.

If not, then you’ll find notes scattered

that will reveal my soul’s soft pitter-patter.

Say it once, my names sake twice,

my story for your intrigue, it will surely suffice.

For these secrets, till now, have been underground,

so many memories, screaming so loud.

So tell him when you find what was mine

of my troubles and all of my time.

All that I had, I wanted to burn it away.

Let it die on its own, I won’t care another day.

I shouldn’t have done so from the very start,

this is my fault, my atrocious art.

Leave me here with my empire of dirt,

stay away, and let my heart still hurt.

This fate, so horrible, is one I deserve,

nothing is good, I have no worth.

Don’t ever try to save me, time you will waste,

and more of my suffering you will create.

So just go away, go far from here,

leave me in solitude, in my own tears.

Never did I deserve life, but what will ensue,

is my death from my life without you.

Reviews

[Bridgette's Ink]

This seems sad, even so, I like it.

[Jibin]

An excellent work dear friend, love the rhyme scheme.
:)

[Kia]

I love you rythem and your usage of words. That last line...very strong!

[Raven Starhawk]

The life of this propels beyond anything life can begin to manage. It is a poem for the ages; carefully composed to expose your craft and bring skill to a whole new level.

[WordNerd]

This is AWESOME :D I love the rhyme scheme. Excellent work Luke :)

[Short.Nerd]

Excellent!

[Rene Velez]

the rhyme scheme is great, thought provoking and intense, nice write

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A very strong and deeply sad piece, well done, good read.

[Coyote Poetry]

A strong and sad story in the poem. When we look back at the bad deeds of a life. Thy can haunt us.
"Leave me here with my empire of dirt,
stay away, and let my heart still hurt.
This fate, so horrible, is one I deserve,
nothing is good, I have no worth."
Thank you for a outstanding poem. I could feel the struggle and the honest words.
Coyote

[Lily Mae]

A powerful and intense write.. I really love the emotion behind it..x