Serenade

Word Power

 

                                                                    

Serenade
  me with alluring charm
titillate and entice my heart

Amorousness

Scintillating igniting flames
    captivating every grain

Romance

  Intertwined 

   Embracing at eventide
entranced we two eye to eye

 

Rendezvous                
Just me and you

Author's Note

Just experimenting with the power of one word...

Reviews

[Michael X]

Embracing at eventide"

this is perfect, honestly perfect, nicely done, shows comand over wording, to be able to place
specific emotional emphasize on form, thus accentuating the intent; implying meaning with feeling.
and the reader can feel the over all charmed ambience, captured in a spell bound moment; a
midnight rendezvous as two heart become one, specifically I felt the image to be transporting
taking the reader to the moment of captivation, nicely done, reflects passion in ligjht of magic.

[Damien Dsoul]

it is such an experimentally written work: the words are spare with capturing adjectives, and emotions. And yet, it still retains much of your style of writing: the font size and arrangements in question. It is romanwe with few words interspaced between. The imagination can only supply the rest.

[Michael]

It's like a romantic version of Ambrose Bierce's dictionary. Well, only insomuch as it gives us a way to define some words, you do not carry his cynical tone. Over all it is a beautifully balanced poem than leads to a loving conclusion.


Well done.

[[untitled]]

Very interesting style and word command. Beautiful imagery.

[Candle in the wind]

I wish this wish could be translated to reality and responded to with love and willingness for every heart that cherishes this dream Well done!

[alienkid]

this isn't a bad poem. i'm not into the romance thing, so i don't really have much to say about the content. structure wise its really cool too, how you have only three line stanzas and i like how the fourth lines of each stanzas are just kind of out ther in their own world, really conveying the theme of the poem.

[Flow]

a sweet dance that gets more intense when they meet. Nicely done, good choices of words and a nice solid flow.

[jen]

very nicely written, it almost 'feels' like an old folk song. I am admittedly a literary novice ... is 'concrete' poetry a genre of poetry? Or poetic device?