Confusion

Not my usual style, at all...wrote this in a few minutes with whatever popped into my head at the moment. I haven't written anything in a really long time..this is the first of hopefully many more.

Confusion

My heart aches

tears falling

wanting

feeling

the earth moves as your hands explore

Mixed emotions encompassing my being

wanting to cry out, beg you to stop, but

dying for more.

Is this who I have become?

Who, what am I?

A soundless scream echoes throughout my mind

oblivious to the torments my soul is exuding

loving it but hating you...

all at the same time.

Confusion lingers for the last seconds past an ecstasy

never to be forgotten

My truth is what I live by,

yours is what you fashion out of the sand,

falling through my fingertips like the time fading away

into oblivion

Thoughts scattered

quiet

so quiet

blissful ending to an

imperfect beginning

Reviews

[Scott Metro]

My truth is what I live by,
yours is what you fashion out of the sand,
falling through my fingertips like the time fading away
into oblivion

I like this thought...truth buried within you..but contrived by someone whose truth changes to suit the situation.
Nicely done Deandra...
Scott

[MoriartyMesa]

A new look and take from your work. This was strong and heartfelt at the same time. It had a tone of the title, Confusion, of emotions, feelings, longing, wanting, and it all blended well to a nice, and loving work.

[J. Alfred Prufrock]

the emotion and inner tormoil shines though on this one. very honest as the best poems are. enjoyed it

[Deandra Dawn]

Thank you very much!

[Rob Santana]

Wow! The agony & The ecstasy, love it. Pen on...

[Bri]

Your word play is amazing, bringing out so much emotion in just a few words. You have a great way of writing. I love the style you've chosen, it's perfect for the image your trying to create.
Well done, friend.

[Deandra Dawn]

Thank you so much!

[zainul]

This piece eloquently expressed your feelings.
Love your style of presentation.
These lines are amazing:
"Confusion lingers for the last seconds past an ecstasy
never to be forgotten"

[Sami Khalil]

"A soundless scream echoes throughout my mind

oblivious to the torments my soul is exuding

loving it but hating you...

all at the same time.

Confusion lingers for the last seconds past an ecstasy

never to be forgotten




My truth is what I live by,"

A splendid read and write...Thank you for penning...:>).........................

[Lucia]

Very nicely done
I liked how you had a mixture between short lines and long lines
very powerful
and it read very well
nice!