The End

The Worlds End

 

 

 

The End

 

 

 

 

Debra Edwards

3/11/2008

 

The End

 

 

 

Darkened skies and troubled water

Praying for all our Sons and Daughters

 

 

As Mother Nature takes human life at will

Fires and floods seem to maim and kill

 

 

 Earthquakes and tornados rip and shred

Leaving all those in its path for dead

 

 

The four horsemen begin to ride

 A rein of terror in their stride

 

 

Mercy is now a thing of the past

As Jesus gathers His very last

 

 

 

 

Reviews

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This was good. The rythem was good. I liked the structure. I think it add more emphasis to the poem. Really good work.

[Larissa G.]

Not bad. It flows very well and sums up the greatest fears of some of us; even if we don't read the bible and go to church on a regular basis we understand exactly what's happening. It's a good bit of poetry. :)

[A.r. Bazian]

very well written!
the poetic structure is powerful and meaningful... regular but armful!
honestly... i tend to refer to the one thats true as Human! i do not think its God's design, and i think its a lot more important for us to gather our shredded pieces of our soul.. and just go somewhere we can start over... but its never too late... weather you believe in God or not, we are All Humans... and Humanity is/was/will be my and my quest!
thats personal... yet it doesn't contradict with the fact that i LOVED the poem!
strong imagery!

keep it up!

[Creepy Swine Guy]

This is a very ominous and forboding poem Debby. It is very well presented. I might offer a few opinions about one stanza. In ...

The four horsemen of the apocalypse appear to ride
Spreading a rain of fear and terror in their stride

... I don't think that "of the apocalypse" is needed. I think most anyone who understands and appreciates the poem will know who the four horsemen are. I think by pulling those three words you give the poem a chance to ohave a more tight and fitting flow. In the next line you used "rain" where I think you wanted "reign". I might have written that stanza something like ...

The four horsemen make their ride
Reigning terror with every stride

Just my thoughts on that. Not to say that it's not very effective as is. Oh and you know how I am about puntuation.

[Phil Sanders]

Powerful .. and compelling writing ....

[Chad Wesley Allbrett]

Concise and true!