Semi Senile

Flash fiction (55)

Wrehhhhzsshhhh, he wheezed, slowly moving along, heavy with the weight of time, and adventures past. He shuddered. Others, more agile, crawled behind him. He had a purpose, a destination, and a deadline. He just had to get going. Semi trucks reminded me of old people. I watched him pass through the intersection onto unknown destinations.

Author's Note

You'll think about this next time you're behind a semi at a stop light. You'll see what I'm talking about. Also, whatever thoughts you have, let me know. I like both good and bad critiques

Credit: Picture is "Glasses" by Mukzter at DeviantArt

Reviews

[JohnnyMagrinho]

I think it's great, a very simple but effective piece but think from "Semi" to "destinations" is unneeded.

[Lydia]

I think you did a good job with this.

[Tony Williams]

beautiful!

[selkietales]

The title is clever :P I didn't really get the story until I read the A/N but once I had that "oh, duhhhhh!" moment the story made sense and I really like it!