Life Lake

I continue to walk through my forest of thoughts broad into reality.
As I summon my mind to betray me as though that was what was, then not now.
Remembering what had been laid to rest long ago, now animated into life back from death
Inside you will see all but mazes of meadow lark show to uphold your guest status in my forest,
Now you yield at my lake of reflection, that reflects all of life living in, on and around this forest
But once you devise a plan you better rethink it twice for the hacking of trees will come down
Let you look hard, cast the glare and see what was then now not now or evermore, so we ask you
what and how do you see in this lake for it reflects life, my forest was what laid to rest
You see nothing but a disillusion for only life reflects not thy death of my forest
Its roots are well grounded, helping me not stray away
If you want to solve and find your way through this maze I wish you luck.
Here is nothing but a lake full of life, and the lack of life., the question remains
Which end you belong in here... at life lake...

Reviews

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

I feel a lot in reading this piece...there is a power of emotion in your poetic voice. You make a lot of interesting and truly poignant statements that give the reader something to latch on to in terms of relating to the work. I also like many of your phrases and images. This has good bones.

Technically, I might suggest a little shortening of some of the lines -- gets a little wordy in some places -- and perhaps a little change in format -- in reading this, especially aloud, it seems to want to be put into a shorter line stanza format. Just some personal thoughts, and by no means discounting your work. Keep writing and I will keep reading!

[Derek Smith]

Hey once again thank you. It's nice to actually have suggestions on feed back not just what some one liked and didn't like you know. I'm not used to breaking my stuff up but apparently I should try lol