not to sentimental

not to sentimental

A Poem by Moonflower

Her fingers drift

fall.ing

over keys and notes

 

She doesn't mind

the shift

and stumbles across

the breaking

point

 

No one sees hers

in the dark

As she gasps in

simple breaths

 

Delicate

the flame that

flickers

Smoke filling

her ample

breast

© 2010 Moonflower


Author's Note

Moonflower
*A quick thought before i head to work!*

My Review

Would you like to review this Poem?
Login | Register




Reviews

"No one sees hers
in the dark
As she gasps in
simple breaths"

Amazingly good read.


Posted 13 Years Ago


I actually like this alot.

Posted 13 Years Ago


short & sweet poem....great:)

Posted 13 Years Ago


Nice read

Posted 13 Years Ago


that's beautiful.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Simply wonderous.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Lush imagery!
Excellent use of wording here too!
Wonderful poem hon
xx

Posted 13 Years Ago


wow wow good yes and i have felt this but not been able to describe it like this so thank you for your wonderful style

Posted 13 Years Ago


the dark covers so much.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Amazing to the point its hard not to sing the praises of your flow and talent. and the imagery and simplicity thats easy to understand yet
brings your words to life because writing poetry is meant for some,

this poem sings everyday life and drifts of thought taken with simple breaths, and sentimentalism is each word delicately surrendered.
A metaphorical snapshot of perfection.

Posted 13 Years Ago



First Page first
Previous Page prev
1
Share This
Email
Facebook
Twitter
Request Read Request
Add to Library My Library
Subscribe Subscribe


Stats

360 Views
25 Reviews
Rating
Added on August 15, 2010
Last Updated on August 15, 2010

Author

Moonflower
Moonflower

Louisville, KY



About
Hello :) My name is Desiree. What brings me to this website is my love for poetry and storytelling. At this time I consider myself more of a poet, than a writer or author. I do not have the pa.. more..

Writing
New New

A Poem by Moonflower


Sheets Sheets

A Poem by Moonflower



Related Writing

People who liked this story also liked..


Sugar and Sun Sugar and Sun

A Poem by Muse


Cracked Cracked

A Chapter by Bare Bohemian