not to sentimental

Her fingers drift

fall.ing

over keys and notes

 

She doesn't mind

the shift

and stumbles across

the breaking

point

 

No one sees hers

in the dark

As she gasps in

simple breaths

 

Delicate

the flame that

flickers

Smoke filling

her ample

breast

Author's Note

*A quick thought before i head to work!*

Reviews

[al25]

Extremely well written. I really enjoy reading your stuff. Your style is so unique and just plain great. Welld don.e

[Miss Coral]

Nice pace and interesting imagery. Nice write. c:

[Cynthia]

It's a very good one. I love that each sentence which is short!

[FocusedAmnesia]

I like the super short lines; really adds to the feel pf the piece.

[vincentbals]

Great job. Nice feeling it has. Thanks!

[Sports Girl]

Nicely done. Sort but holds a good amount of feeling. Great job

[Liz]

"As she gasps/In simple breaths" I really like those lines. This is a nice write. It's kind of more complex than meets the eyes, so that when you read it a second time, you find more things to it. Nice work! :)

[Young Mountain]

This was really great. Stumbles across the breaking point, is such a powerful line that gives such emotion to the piece. The last line caught me off a bit, but I still think its a great piece.

Thanks for sharing

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

a beautiful solo~

[Robin]

very good writing - again