hallucinatory thought-speaking

 

You'll find

that

 

Im.balance

 

is possible

this time of year

 

When you choose to hang

your head

 

When every thing

is so

 

...unclear...

 

And if madness

is a game

 

would you not wish to play?

 

I think you

would...regret

 

Having any thing

to say

 

I'll force

those

thoughts inside

 

Shove them

deep

into your brain

 

And when you find 

the darkness

 

there

 

You'll feel a bit insane.

Author's Note

blahh..just thinking, inspired by dreams and random bull shi-it ;)

Reviews

[M.Kilani]

this is actually good !! sounds evil, yet I think it's a matter of showing strength of mind. dark, ambiguous, chaotic, and at the same time attractive.
the flow was amazing, it creates its own tune and the pause on each line makes it mystique .
outstanding.

insane in the membrane.

[Crinkle°]

I love it!

[Bard Constantine]

I like the sparse sentencing, the... pauses in between thoughts, which creates a rambling tone that shows a stream of consciousness type of writing. Nicely done...

[al25]

Like the setup of the poem. the way you word every line is so unique and effective. Really enjoyed reading this. Good job.

[Sports Girl]

Interesting piece but it was good

[~~~~~]

Stream of consciousness, random BS as you call it, always an interesting mix of emotions and reverie untangling from one's inner labyrinth. A poetic purge I call it. It's good to release through art no matter what medium you choose. I like how you separated the word Imbalance to read I'm Balance.

[nono]

This is very thought provoking nice job! I loved it.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

curios eerie little slide of thought into the reader's conscious mind~

[Cynthia]

It's a interesting think!