hallucinatory thought-speaking

 

You'll find

that

 

Im.balance

 

is possible

this time of year

 

When you choose to hang

your head

 

When every thing

is so

 

...unclear...

 

And if madness

is a game

 

would you not wish to play?

 

I think you

would...regret

 

Having any thing

to say

 

I'll force

those

thoughts inside

 

Shove them

deep

into your brain

 

And when you find 

the darkness

 

there

 

You'll feel a bit insane.

Author's Note

blahh..just thinking, inspired by dreams and random bull shi-it ;)

Reviews

[Norma M Sutton]

Interesting concepts in this.

[Sonia]

Wow, very interesting piece. I like it!

[Miss Coral]

Interesting piece with thoughtful words. Nice write.

[Jonathan De Elvira]

Wow, u have succeed in making feel I'm staying in my subconscious yet empty mind...
Good job on making the readers feel hanging above the ground...confusing, doubting, and wondering around...

n yet, this was only a simple poem..how could is that?? :O

[Robin]

excellent example of how the writer can affect the mood of the reader .

[Forever Mine]

Simple.beautiful. emotional. I loved it

Yes! This is much more exciting and fast and hits the reader with the emotion and the "What?" at the end. It makes the reader want to read it a second time just to really hone in on it. Good job. I'd like to see this more from you with some of your other poems. Very nice sounding, and captivating. Great read. Thanks.

[A-Lovely-Anxiety]

Beautiful. Very simple, yet so emotional. Amazing as always dear.

This one is similar to another piece of yours where the beginning started off promising and wonderful and then kind of slipped at the end. keep trying and pushing yourself to get through this issue. Your poems will be masterful if you can overcome this. thanks

[loowzerX]

i like it. simple yet effective. :)