From the Ashes

of your guitar..

 

 

 

 

Her body burned,

 

in fiery vengeance

 

with curling smoke

 

that  billowed

 

out around charred edges

 

There was a sinister air,

 

caked with fumes

 

Fueled by the black oil that

 

escaped her lips,

 

 pillowed by ash

 

If I destroyed you

 

in various, subtle ways

 

Could you forgive me, with

 

a flinch  and a whisper

 

that carried hints of goodbye

 

Light fell,

a curious dawn approaching

 

In a folded backdrop

 

 with nervous eyes

 

I felt the ground shake, but maybe that

 

was just my hands

 

Reaching for that aching look

 

that shadowed your tear adorned features

 

When you sucked in your breath

 

Did you hear the wind blow

 

through climbing branches

 

I remember when you told me

 

about the stars, the ancient little secrets

 

Each one held

 

And then you took my hands

 

and kissed each finger

 

cradled in your spider hands..

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem is amazing. Started strong and got better with each line.
"Could you forgive me, with
a flinch and a whisper
that carried hints of goodbye"
The use of strong statements made the poem come alive. I like the way you ended the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

This is a beautiful poem.
Your work heartfelt.
My favorite instrument at that.

[Sweets]

So very creative :)
Wonderful work :)

[Jaco (Jaik Miller)]

This would be a good one to read aloud. My favorite thing about it was how it flowed and all the syllables seemed to line up. Very good my friend

[Jonathan De Elvira]

Wow, I've never read a poem about how someone could describe their lovely instrument like you did, well done. Very well done.

[Akshat♥]

Well expressed!!!
I like how you have presented the way of love..
I loved that:)