Why Did I Ever Grow Up?

Don't we all sometimes wish we could stop time?

Tick, Tock

Went the clock

Why can’t the time piece stop?

Wouldn’t it be a fine idea to never grow up?

To have only worries,

Of the monsters that live in your closet.

No, interaction with the dreadful things of the world,

I don’t want to grow up.

Remember,

The mess you made with all your toys?

Remember,

Your imaginative friend you told everything to?

I don’t want to grow up.

What’s the greatest thing about growing up?

Nothing �"

You have stress

You are cast with insecurities

There’s a whole list

And I don’t want to face the fact,

But why did I ever grow up?

Author's Note

I wrote this one over the weekend. I feel as if it could and should be stronger, but I can't really think of anything at the moment. I am open to any suggestions. : )

Reviews

[Archia]

Pity we have to grow up. I loved how you expressed this. I think though that it could use some more rhyme; not so it flows better but just so it's more readable. I loved the first three lines, they really opened it for the rest of the poem.

[Susanna F]

Boy, do I relate to this one. I felt it every day from my teens into my twenties, until I found my place and my true self. Now, I still feel that way once in a while, but I wouldn't go back. You really captured the often unspoken fear that we all have!

[Jasmine Thousand]

I don't think it needs anymore.
It's amazing! Unless this is freestyle, I feel like you should work a bit more on the rhyme scheme...?
But amazing. Totally relatable. I feel like this a lot.
It has a kind of Peter Pan feel to it! :)
Love it

[~Dragon X]

Trust me on this--whenever I feel some poem of piece of work isn't strong enough, and I go back and do whatever I can to make it stronger, it becomes IMMENSELY powerful. Well well done.
I, with my teeny dragon paws, applaud you. :D

[Summer'sBreeze]

this is something i can kinda relate to at the moment
i really liked this poem
great work!

[Ice Girl]

Pretty good! Good job!

[Miss Evans]

I like the idea behind this, and the general feel of the poem is a good start, your wording could use some work though.

Sometimes things need to rhyme, and I think this one should have more of a rhyming scheme to associate it with childhood. For me, I think kids naturally rhyme because that's what we grow up on. Fairytales and nursery rhymes.

Maybe find your own words to round out the meter.

Other than that, it's really good. I enjoyed it.