Falling Heaven

Falling Heaven

 

You wanted to make a bet

The person who falls first

Loses

 

Let me suck in my pride

And admit

I lost

 

I fell for you

I’m still falling for you

And you just don’t have a clue

 

I act the way you do

All tough and emotionless

But inside there are butterfly wings

Whispering against my stomach

Every time I see you

 

I don’t know how long

I can keep up this act

I don’t know how long

I can mirror your actions

 

It’s killing me inside

Watching you with others

It’s killing me inside

Being without you

 

I just don’t know what to do

I don’t know what to say

I don’t know how to be

If not with you

 

You beat me

My darling

You won

I lost

Your prize is my heart

My prize is ridding of it

So you can’t hurt me

Because you will hurt me

I know that much

And I’ll let you

To experience just a bit

Of paradise 

Author's Note

Honestly, writing this poem could have been the last thing I've ever done. Right after I finished writing it, we had an earthquake that I think scraped off 5 years of my life x.x

Reviews

[Damien Davison]

Wow, nicely done. Crazy how it could have been the last thing you ever did. Thanks for sharing that.

[Steven]

Well, glad to hear you didn't die ;). This:

"Your prize is my heart
My prize is ridding of it"

Is just terrible... lol, no I'm kidding! ;D I love it. Because it's so f*****g intuitive. You're right, when someone steals your heart, that's just what they do. They own a part of your soul. And if you can't be with them, then you have to cut it out. Cut them out. And that's hard to do. Could feel the raw emotions throughout this piece. Nicely done :).

[John Alexander McFadyen]

hi Destinyxi, Such a good portrayal of unrequited love and the bitter sweet emotion it evokes.

[John Stussy]

Wow, I liked the bittersweet tone of this poem. Sucks to lose at that game, when that person won't leave your mind even when you try to ignore the fact that you're thinking about them. But at the same time, sometimes the fire's heat isn't enough. Sometimes a little burn is required, just to feel something that strong. Don't chase the fire too long though or it'll char you, scar you, permanently. Great work as always.

[That_Girl]

"But inside there are butterfly wings
Whispering against my stomach"

That's brilliant. I love this! He's so blind... you're amazing. Hopefully he shapes up soon and sees what is being offered. :)