A Poem

An impossible love story.

I needn’t stroke your silken hair
or touch rose petal skin.
The type of love I have for you....
it burns from deep within.

While in my soul the fires rage,
and nothing is consumed.
My spirit wanders aimlessly,
from room to darkened room.

The proper words I cannot say,
to show you my great love.
Yet here I’m staring at your face,
while you look from above.

Still my heart stirs with great desire,
to reach up and touch you.
As these feelings that I’m feeling,
I know they’re in you too.

 

But you will someday think of me,
when this book you have closed.
And I am just a memory....
and not the one you chose.

Alas...
Of all that I have looked up at,
‘tis you I wished I’d known.
For yours is a breathing spirit,
and mine.... I’m just a poem.

 

A Sean Allen Poem

© 2006 D McDaniel Hayden

Reviews

[Edward James]

With 50+ reviews, I doubt I can tell you anything new or groundbreaking as far as analysis goes, so I'll say that I really do like this poem. I'm a sucker for old fashioned rhyme schemes and rhythm, and not being a visual person, for me the aural sensation of reading a poem is quite often every bit as important as the message conveyed. Saying that, I love the pulse of this piece, and the idea that a poem (whether yours or someone else's) is observing and caring for you in the same way you do it is quite pleasant. I think I may have to reevaluate some poetry after reading this.

Nice write, I look forward to reading more

Edward

[Elise O'Haire]

I really loved this! It is filled with such deep emotion and very inviting. Great job...and thanks for the review you gave me!

Elise O'Haire

[Middagslapie]

Beautifull! I am no professional, but reading something someone else wrote from the heart... lovely! I am so glad i joined this place... Gives me so much inspiration.

[Brette Medb]

I particularly loved the last line.. .this was filled with so much longing and the flow was pure. Nice imagery although you could have used a little bit more... great write!


B.

[Pema Dorje]

oh, a plaint of the Love that's never reached, that haunted one you write so eloquantly of here ... ahh, a sweetly scribed plaint, which whispers from somewhere delicate within, there, that place that speaks in the language of silence, where dwells the spirit, there, your heart my Dear ...

lovely writing Sean ...

[Brentley]

I liked the way you put that. Describing poetry with such visual effects that most people can relate too.

[Kaykay]

ok poem. simple with goo flow.

[Celtic Cat]

wow. Incredibly sensitive and sorrow-filled. Eloquently rhymed, this is a fine expression of love and heartbreak. Beautiful.

[Jenny Davis]

I decided to come over and read another of yours tonight and I am so glad I did...I think this is one of your best! So full of love and passion, this is...and I feel like you are talking to someone who is not in this world anymore, per your references to her being 'above.' Your words were magical in this :)

[Blackbirdsong]

Hopefully I haven't reviewed this before, but either way this is a gorgeous poem about love. After over 100 reviews there really isn't much left for anyone to say except, Bravo!

[Norma J. Jessee]

It seems I have reviewed this breathtaking poem before. I can't remember. Whether I have or haven't doesn't matter because I love it so much. I will read it over and over. There's no other word I can find to describe this other than breathtaking. It just takes my breath away. You're a great writer Donn.