Caged in Porcelain

A poem about my ex..

Locked in a cage,

Bounded by love,

Pressed under the weight of my fickle heart.

I'm trapped here for eternity. 

Like an incubus in the ebony sphere of an arclight.

Though I am not a possession of evil.

Nor am I of light.

I only know of one thing; My love for him.

But I won't let myself slip into his slimey grip again.

The demon of love-deception.

Neglecting the innocence of a girl.

I lay in the swirl of porcelain,

Staring at the bottom.

Blood bleeds into white, a contrast I've come to admire.

The black pit opens up.

My demon awaits.

The porcelain of my sleepless nights strips away.

Like chipped paint.

I'm sucked in.

His greedy, cold fingers wrap around my scars.

AND HE YANKS.

I'm helpless.

But for some reason, I want to be.

I want to be controlled, weak.

I want to fall into his trap.

I'm locked in a cage...

Who holds the key?

Reviews

[MaliKate]

I'm not sure as to who you intended to hold the key, but truth is, I think you are! You say you want to be controlled and weak, and you want to fall into his trap. But then what if you didn't want to? Then you'd fight, wouldn't you? So you'd be holding the key to let yourself out of there.

I love the description and the way this is so beautifully written, almost cryptic with the question at the end. My interpretation might not be correct but I myself find it relatively plausible.

Terrific job, you have a natural talent that already I adore. I'm keen to look at more of your work.

- M.

[Rahul]

Raw and very powerful one. Emotions're floating in this piece. great write.
thanks for sharing

[sounds of shadows]

raw, powerful and poignant - the pain and longing sit in puddles on top of the words

[chaotic katie]

Very powerful and emotional. It reaches out to the reader and makes them feel. A sure sign of an amazing poet. Fantastic job.

[Dana Alsamsam]

it's thought provoking how you continually use the same syntax and the same or similar length in sentences. i don't know if you did this intentionally, but it emphasizes the feeling of being "caged," or like you're in a box, which i thought was really cool!

[LadySoDivine]

I know that pain. But you have to remember - you're the one who holds the key. Get loose from the cage. It feels much better, believe me. Wonderful poem.

[Nami Machae]

I enjoyed reading this

[Simon Welsh]

This is rather lovely and thought provoking. I like!

[SamanthaSweeney]

I love love love the imagery in this poem.
The pain you describe is so vivid whilst the love is also so strong.
The contrast is great.
The use of porcelain suggests the beauty or your love perhaps... the fragility of it?

Really thought provoking. I liked this a lot :)

[quinfinn]

pretty obvious who holds the key here.....clever and engaging write indeed. a little on the self loathing side, but deliberately so and well penned.