Tatts

A little poem I wrote about my dream guy. It's not very emotional but it hints at some feelings. Please don't hate me because I like guys who express themselves through body art...

Black hair, dark as a jet,

Tattoos so menacing, 

Yet to me, not a threat.

 

Blue eyes, so immense

Plugs gauged in your ears,

Intense.

 

Smile, as white as the Sun,

My heart;

Already won.

 

Though vanity,

Has not decided this newfound crush,

Just the thought of being in your arms, gives me this rush.

Determined,

To forget who I was,

By embracing you, will I feel loved?

 

My eyes only hide the truth,

And my arms, to,

Grew up to fast, it destroyed my youth.

 

So bring me back,

So I can breathe again,

In the arms, of a man with tatts.

Author's Note

The pic used for the poem is Tony from Pierce The Veil <3
THIS was really hard because I could not decide on pics.
Sowwy >.< I love them all.

Reviews

[unsavable_soul]

I really like this,
I personally am a fan of tatts on a woman, done tastefully often punkesque is very much a visual appeal, placement and contrast are everything. That said I love the sentiments and emotion in this I thought though perhaps your beginning might have more a descriptive beauty you seem to naturally have in the latter portion. Eh just a little more time on the way you say what you say. Hahahaaa
I made a funny, so be careful not to step in that.
Seriously though, good write and I think self definition in the form of what we want in others that might be permanent emotional investments is ever important. Trust me don't settle when you set ideals, even if others call you vain. Mr./Ms. right will come along, or at least close enough.
Much love Bubbling Brooke.
Sincerely
Christopher
100/100
P.s. Thanks for the read request sorry for my slacker disposition of late.

[Graveyardfuck]

It's fine :)

[unsavable_soul]

#_# thanks.

[popourii]

Thank you for sharing. I personally didn't particularly care for it due to it's unrelatable content. But that doesn't mean it was a bad piece of writing. You expressed yourself well and the pictures adds some color to the scene.

[MADDYH]

GIIIIRL!!! I FEEL THIS! GAHHH TATTS

[JulieÉmile]

Shouldn't it be 'determined' instead of 'Determinated' in your fifth stanza. Also in the last line of your sixth stanza, it should be 'too fast' of 'to fast'. This were the few errors that I noticed. Other than that, very good job.

You have also arranged the pictures neatly with each and every stanza. Everything fits so nicely in your poem. Makes it a pleasure to read. Thank you for sharing this!

[QuietlyCrash]

AHHH TONY THE TURTLE!!JKDFHSD.
Okay now that I'm done fangirling, I really enjoyed this poem. It's short but very lovely. :)

[Criss ;)]

Not bad........liked this flow. you dropped just what you wanted to write, what you want from your life....you just converted your feelings into your own words.
nicely written.

[Divyanshu Kachhap]

Lovely use of pics with each para...... enjoyed reading the poem :)

[minnie:)]

hmmmm, not a big fan of tats, but your poem was very creative. :)
~Minnie

[sounds of shadows]

Clearly, guys with body art activate not only your libido but your creativity as well. Nice.

[quinfinn]

piercing and gauging aren't really my thing....but to each their own.