Mouth Scrape

The trashes were embroidered with a senior pride,

cherished its own smell.

Observation was sharpened,

to adorn their blue like flaws with a shiny laughter.

Singing a verse of hilarious nausea seemed significant. 

Eclipse looked up at the stars.

Author's Note

not happy with the outcome.

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

Contrasts here of trash and lots of it, smelling, causing nausea and then eclipsing it, blacking it out to look at the heavens. Made me think of what we are doing to our planet. No wonder some of us seek solace in the stars. That's where you took me moog-drika in this short write which is packed with imagery.

Chris

[moog-drika]

I guess I get all the ideas by looking at our planet. Sometimes I feel like exploring the other planets and stuffs which is never possible haha.
Thank you so much for taking a ride to the vision of the write. I'm so glad to have you there.

[Chris Shaw]

Pleased for my visit :)

[Saoirse K.]

the realization that the present moment and it's concerns
have no bearing in the grand scheme
the master plan of the cosmos just 'winging it'
and here we are, nigh on nothing
keeping stock of trash and refuse
impregnating nil with the weight of existence
meanwhile stars align for a hot minute
and none but a doomsday prophet seem to notice or care,
what with doomsday being the monday after any given sunday
so the stars turn to the cosmic mirror
and who could blame them for their ambition
this little blue wasn't worth its salt
i enjoyed this
good write

[moog-drika]

I guess this is the current scenario of reality and surreality. The turmoil in Earth and the turmoil in Cosmos makes the actual difference.
it feels like we leave ourselves here around the stock of trash and take our thoughts out of the world.
But WOW! I must say this interpretation makes me absolute speechless. You literally explored every corner and edge of the vision.
Thank you so much for such a BEAUTIFUL review! It made me explore the write and gave a different experience.
Thanks a lot again although it's not enough!

[Rye]

Very intriguing here and deep. I like this write a lot

[moog-drika]

Thanks a bunch for your kind words :'D

[Onlyme]

Interesting piece that speaks of trash and the Eclipse. The Ying and Yang of life in general. The muck, dirt and disdain of sicking things that go on. And the beauty and pleasing things to the eye and heart, mind and soul. A lot said inside a neat tidy poem.

[moog-drika]

This was such a pleasant summary to read. Thank you so much for all the positive words. :'D

[Onlyme]

my pleasure sweetheart.

[CA Anurag Sharma]

So much said in few words. The sound of victory it depicts which always is the best sound. Nice one..

[moog-drika]

I'm so glad to have a new meaning from this review. Loved it. Thank you so much for the praise. :'D

[light and ashes]

I'm kind of confused by this piece.....the imagery is literally trash but the wording is really nice...I guess it takes a lot of talent to do that so great job? lol

[moog-drika]

yup, tried to depict a trash like situation, but I have made it blank enough to fill more meanings from readers. So, you can extract anything from the piece. But thanks so much for the positive words. :'D

[wordman]

and we go out of the way to disguise it

[moog-drika]

typical characters of people. haha

[¿]

Well the whole piece is mirroring some real acts of daily roller coaster life to me...."Observation was....... a shiny laughter" which person of this earth can't relate to this? At least I can😧....However, tis helping us somehow!
"Happy Victory Day!!!"😃

[moog-drika]

I rather find people more of a roller coaster ride. 😣 but thanks a lot sweetie for the review. And Happy Victory Day.

[¿]

You're warmly welcome!😇

[Phill Oz O'fee]

The mouth is involved in the expression of many different emotions, from happiness to sadness, from fear to disgust; so I can see from where your metaphorical reflections have evolved. Interesting and thought-provoking read... :-)

[moog-drika]

Exactly, this is what you get when you get a storm on your mind. A mixture of different feelings. Thanks so much for these words. They mean a lot.