Thoughts of a Cloud

It is a cloudy grey day and I felt like channeling a cloud... or maybe letting a cloud channel me...

Thoughts of a Cloud

 

I am there

in the glimmering morning

the weight of dreamless nights

burning away in the warmth

of your love

a Smokey Mountain mist.

 

Between your eye and a faint yellow glow

I live

an ever transforming landscape

floating beyond reason

until your imagination gives me form.

 

Billowing pillows of cotton like softness

sweet as cream

whipped and layered

upon the tartness of your tongue

I wait to be tasted

 

A chill pushes me upward

mushrooming thunderheads rumble

electric in proximity to you

I become a downpour

quenching a lusting thirst

 

I am still here

a grey sheeted greenhouse

humidity, glued to the tree tops

longing to ascend to the heavens

embraced in the warmth of you

 

My love for you will show

look up… look out upon the painted sky

I live in the blue eyes of a clear sky

refracted in all the colors

condensed within your dreams

Reviews

[BThomvanWart]

I like the nature of this piece. It's so...carefree and enlightening. The very tone of the poem, to me, was in itself soft and cotton like. Almost as if it's a lullaby, but much more mature and admirable. Very nice work!

[David Scott]

Thank you very much. You're given a kind review.

[andrew mitchell]

Top notch David I love clouds and mixed with a presentation of love, its a job well done

[David Scott]

Clouds are nature's ink blot test... They become what we imagine them to be.

[andrew mitchell]

I know!! I often as a kid saw faces and animal heads as they changed lol

[Willard Wells]

Beautifully written words of love painted up in the sky. The imagery and flow were very nice and the words selection made it perfect. Thanks.

[David Scott]

Thank you Will. I need to edit the format, but it is lose to presentable.

[Willard Wells]

I did not give you much time after it was posted. It is presentable as you say and a little more.

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What I love is the intensity with the promise of expansion. Earth and sky meet in a smokey mountain mist :) "I become a downpour Quenching a lusty thirst" Well, I told you I love storms...love the passion expressions in this, David :)

[David Scott]

I'm glad you read this. After reading your poem I thought this might be one you could enjoy.
Thank you for reading and leaving a comment.

[Nani Mino]

this is not thoughts of a cloud but a storm of love. really amazing piece.

[David Scott]

Well, when clouds appear rain may follow... Thank you very kindly for the review.

[Mélania Woolf]

The imagery in this poem is piercing! I enjoyed every single line you wrote. Only a talented poet can craft in such an elegant way that would reach to the reader's mind and move their senses!

[David Scott]

Thank you for the review and for your compliment. I am far from the talent I read in others work, but I am grateful some of my words find a resonate tone with others.
I will stop by soon to read your work.

[Linda alexander]

I live in the blue eyes of a clear sky

refracted in all the colors

condensed within your dreams
Great imagination and excellent flow , impressed, take care

[David Scott]

Thank you. You are very kind.

[Linda alexander]

You welcome, take care, happy nurses week

[AprilRN1210]

ooooooh, don't turn the channel, the imagery and emotion in this one is lovely.. how the heck did I miss this one?.. the phrasing is an enchanting and magical as the images presented.. you do have a way with words mister.. oooooh yea!...

If I could suggest/critique anything, it would be...
"look up… look out upon the painted sky
I live in the blue eyes of a clear sky"..... used "sky" twice here.. I would suggest maybe changing the second one to "clear day"..

[AprilRN1210]

*as* not "an"... grrr stinking keyboard.. yea, I know.. "operator error" more likely.. :P

[David Scott]

First, what a cute picture! Stunning. :)
Second, thank you for reading this poem.
Third, I'm so happy to actually get some advice and critique to improve my poetry.
Your review and your spirit is a blessing tonight.

[Jamestown]

This is so well written and executed, imagery is crystal clear and amazing flow.
I enjoyed this poem, top to bottom, thanks for sharing and b-blessed.

[David Scott]

Thank you for the kind review. I am blessed indeed. :)

[An owl on the moon]

This is so beautiful.. so transcendent... time seems to stop as one drifts through your words.. your sighs.. of clouds and life.. of painted skies and worlds of color... I could feel the world calming... like magic..

[David Scott]

Thank you Craig. My poetry is really very simple compared to your work. Your comments are generous and encouraging.