Homecoming

A presentation of openness and welcome.

Welcome

Your pigmented glance

a vivid blush upon this page,

the poetry of your attention

 painting upon

 the ether of my soul. 

 Yet, pathetic read

 these inspirations conveying

 yearning stretched

from sunrise to sunset

fading into lavender

understanding.

Still, visions dream

 glittering tones of epiphany...

 

Can you hear... 

these petals of intention? 

Are you listening openly for

vibrations, scattering wishes;

splashing your mind's sky

with hope and love?

Wavelengths blossoming... 

cascades of fluttering waves

blending into a brilliantly

 blinding, silken starlight,

 splashed recklessly

 across midnight's suede. 

 Delicious earthy fragrance...

humming orange sensuality

begging of you,

 open the ears of your eyes

 to Gabriel's trumpet. 

Crystallized... 

this echo of an Eagle's song, 

a milky prismatic rainbow of sound

singing illuminated dreams

within the choir of Earth,

 giving azure ocean's viscous voices

 words to sing. 

Harmonies streaming... 

channel the wind's many curling rills

awakening consciousness.

 What you will see?

 What would you hear? 

This is my embrace for you... 

 Welcome

Reviews

[Richard🖌]

Gosh, David!
How elegantly this is presented to the mind, heart, and soul, and your phraseology is second to none, My Friend, and it is far more impacting and easy to follow, than when read in your original format … simply lovely.
Techy stuff: (punctuation) A few less periods (stops) would produce a smoother, more continuous flow, and examine the rule for semicolons. I wonder at the word "viscous" (thick/sticky?). Your groupings are virtually spot-on in context, meaningful timbre, and emotional moment … what a way to keep and hold one's attention, just long enough to absorb and enjoy, before moving-on to the next step in your poetic journey … it really bade me enjoy the story.

Few pen more impacting Free Verse poetry, than you have here, David, and the ending is perfection at its finest.
Your skills are really dancing for us here, and I thank you ever-so gratefully for sharing this excellent piece of genuine warmth, sweet emotion, and flowing poetic beauty … it's a winner! ⁓ Richard


95/100

[David Scott]

Thank you Richard. Your advise helped me rework this a bit last night. I have been writing on my I phone and it is awkward at best for editing purposes.
Thank you for the encouraging comment. I know I am not a professional writer and it feels like a compromise every time I post, but I think I need to just get it down and out... Not sure why, but I just do. In my profession, I have to be much more exacting.
I used viscous hear to convey a fullness and thickness of the ocean's voice; as apposed to the usual fluidity of the water itself. Kind of like thick plaster becomes fluid when placed on a vibration, once lifted off the vibration of the ocean, its voice solidifies into a sort of gel in the mind of the listener. Maybe it is hard to convey every intention.
I like to think of how heavy a feather is and how light a rock is... etc...
Anyhow, I think your kindness has already paid dividends in my mind. Thank you for taking the time to actually instruct rather than pass by with a glance.
Be well.

[Richard🖌]

What a pleasure it is to join-in with you, David … thanks for including me, My Fine Friend.

[Richard🖌]

Sp: "Channel" the wind's

[David Scott]

thank you again... :/ yikes.

[Richard🖌]

Ain't it fun?

[Philip Muls]

The start and ending with the word Welcome is a nice touch. Hope and love is what I read throughout this poem. A warm welcoming embrace.

[David Scott]

Thank you for your comment and your time. I am on a dive trip in Utila this week, but I will try to get by and read your work soon.

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

This is so delicious and inviting for all the senses. It's an awakening of spirit, a blossoming of heart. Beautiful!

[David Scott]

Thank you for reviewing Linda. I am glad you felt the welcome. 😀

[Pryde Foltz]

A blending brilliance
blinding silken starlight,
splashed recklessly,
across midnight's suede.

This may qualify as the epitome of a high frequency poem, Bravo.

[David Scott]

Thank you. Inspired by an angelic lady to be sure.

[Lydia Shutter]

Gentle, velvety romance. David, this is absolutely lovely. You touch on all the senses with your spectacular imagery. So happy to read your words again. Lydi**

[David Scott]

Thank you for your kind words. As usual, I must say the inspiration was a gift bestowed.
I'm happy the words resonate.
Be well dear Lydi.

[Sami Khalil]

"A milky prismatic rainbow of sound.
Sing illuminated dreams among Earth's choir.
Give the azure ocean's viscous voices words to sing."

Homecoming has its yearnings, expectations and embraces. We find solace and awakened souls illuminated in all the brilliance. A masterful write...:)............

[David Scott]

Thank you Sami. Gifts abound and your words to me are gifts indeed.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. You are welcome muchly. ....:)........

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, lynn is right, a beautiful work of art...it's like an artist's masterpiece in which i hear John Lennon and John Denver speaking of nature and peace and welcoming with loving arms...

if only we could all sing together.

j.

[David Scott]

Indeed. We sing here, I think. Thank you for the visit Jacob. I feel rusty. Have not written a poem in a long time until last night. Feels good.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you might feel rusty...but your words seem as well oiled as ever, my friend.

glad to see you writing again...it's been some time and i missed reading you.

j.

[David Scott]

Thank you. Your words do mean a great deal to me. Thank you for your constant encouragement and support.

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Hello David :) What a beautiful work of art this is, and a warm generous offering of the heart. Some striking lines you have here, "delicious, earthy fragrance, humming orange sensuality"? YUM! "sing illuminated dreams among earth's choir"? Sigh...the whole poem is an enchanted gift to read, sir. I loved it!

[David Scott]

I am honored by you review. Thank you Lynn. I hv not written in over a year. This is me opening back up again.