Unliveable

Thoughts over the course of a day. Whilst watching Equus, listening to Pulp and escaping the day and/or life. Cause we're all just merely escaping life instead of living it. So, are we really here?

If all we're doing is escaping life in some way or another,

Then are any of us really here?

If we're all just thoughts and thoughts of thoughts,

Then are any of us really thinking?

If we're all either sleeping too much or not enough,

Staying up late for no reason and yet tired of life,

Then are any of us really awake?

Somebody's someone everybody's no-one,

Not long to go but nowhere to go,

You can't go on yet you do.

Want to leave but you don't,

Going nowhere but everyone's always going somewhere.

If we left out the lies in our lives then it would become unliveable.

If you live forever past the present, 

You'll find there's nothing there other than what's past.

If you live and die for the truth you'll discover that it was a lie.

It's easy to make a mess of our lives,

Everything is clutter and we're all someone else's mess.

Life is stupid. That's why people spend their lives doing stupid things. 

To prove that we're not stupid.

Are any of us really here?

We say we're doing fine when we're not,

Everyone's someone else's nightmare.

We've all got it wrong yet we're all right,

This world is a nightmare of a nightmare

And you're my nightmare.

 Best Theme/Moral 

Mar 7, 2011

• Depressing Poems
• Unliveable

 10th 

Mar 25, 2011

• Life has taught me! "poems"
• Unliveable

 Better of the Best 

Apr 25, 2011

• Dark Poems
• Unliveable

Reviews

[Alessander]

You won a depressing poem badge!? I'm impressed lol

But seriously, I really like the word play in this. Reminds me of ee cummings "anyone lived in a pretty how town"

anyone lived in a pretty how town
(with up so floating many bells down)
spring summer autumn winter
he sang his didn't he danced his did

Women and men(both little and small)
cared for anyone not at all
they sowed their isn't they reaped their same
sun moon stars rain

I think it's the almost stream of thought and word connections, which although playful and somewhat paradoxical, belies a sadder core. Everything in this poem is both true and untrue.

I applaud, with one hand clapping.

[A.Lee]

Creative and thoughtful. I love the questions in the first stanza. Nice work.

[J.P. Bristow]

Into my favs...

[2Real2BTrue]

This review is a little late, but I love this poem! It's so well written and it sums up my life and the routine lives of countless others. Very insightful.

[sarah]

this is amazing and amazing picture! great work

[imawriter]

Very deep... and brought to my mind Poe's 'A Dream Within a Dream'. Yes, that was a compliment as Poe is one of my favourite authors. :)

[Bloody_Stars]

This is really good :)

[KAREN]

Many questions to answer! So much to think about! But that's what good poems do, make you think! Excellent!!

[SpokenWord]

Many of your thoughts in this poem ring true and a few made me smile. I like how it is all a dream within a dream inside of another dream state of existing. Are we real? well sometimes I think not until I feel an aching pain which is a constant reminder that I am alive for sure because it hurts! :) I vote we pinch everyone who feels life is but a dream!

Great write indeed a lot to ponder and consider in this one.

[Poeticadia]

This is like putting life through a kaleidoscope and trying to work out which is the true image. And it does a grand job of exposing how much we rely on our perceived meanings of words to describe our reality… what we believe to be our truth… but how meanings can be deceptive and how truth/meaning can alter with time. A very lyrical and probing poem.