Rough Beginnings

Rough Beginnings

A Poem by John Harden
"

How I met my best friend...

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Her dad left when she was small
And her mom remarried to alcohol.

Labeled as a “troubled” child
Her mom considered her too wild.

She called her a mistake
And showered her with hate.

Sadden, her wrist no stranger to pain
A release she found by cutting a vein.

Her “guardian” continued sowing words of hate
And the young girl soon began doubting her faith.

Feeling numb, cold and alone
She ran away in search of a new home.

In downtown Dallas, she found a community center,
A place she considered using as a shelter.

She began her life with a rough beginning
And was searching for life with a meaning.

She ran into a guy who was volunteering that day,
Their eyes met and by her side he would  stay.

© 2008 John Harden


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This the kind of poem, which is being strongest in its beginning, "Her dad left when she was small
And her mom remarried to alcohol.

Labeled as a “troubled” child
Her mom considered her too wild.

She called her a mistake
And showered her with hate."----gives a huge impact while reading, I really liked this.

I thought, why this is so touchy, because it can be...... anybody.. we all have small tiny lives full of "s**t" ...... I really loved this, the fact that the poem would end so positively, made me feel well. I like outlooks. Great job!!



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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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this is touching :) great poem

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

beautiful poem..love it

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This the kind of poem, which is being strongest in its beginning, "Her dad left when she was small
And her mom remarried to alcohol.

Labeled as a “troubled” child
Her mom considered her too wild.

She called her a mistake
And showered her with hate."----gives a huge impact while reading, I really liked this.

I thought, why this is so touchy, because it can be...... anybody.. we all have small tiny lives full of "s**t" ...... I really loved this, the fact that the poem would end so positively, made me feel well. I like outlooks. Great job!!



Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You portray the feelings of sadness and pain very well in this. And though the pace is off at times, it didn't take away from this piece for me. A very nice write.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

wow! I love it! I also like the rhyme scheme! :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Theres more to this story but thats another poem.

Posted 11 Years Ago


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This is beautiful. I especially like the line, "And her mom remarried to alcohol." It's a good story, well written. Very well done.

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John Harden
John Harden

Fort Worth, TX



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Eh, what to say? Im a journalism major. I like to meet new people. I love to write. I'm very open. I work what feels like a million hours a day. I'll add more to this later! If you want to know m.. more..

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