Lament

On nights like these I praise no more
For the loss of my only ardor
Was taken so many nightly years ago
And with it went my heart ten fold
Now lost in all of losses lunacy
Misery now beckons at my door
With the grave of my ardor out yonder yore
Broken and cracked yet not forgotten lore

Solitude is what I offer with my life
For I gave it to her as my wife
Now solitude I�ve implemented
For no more love can I handle
That of which brought me here
In solitudes mass castle
To gaze upon myself with none
For the one I loved is gone

Taken by deaths scythe of reason
A reason I have yet to reckon
Other than to punish me for my deeds
As a young one with a solitary wish
To be loved and love the one he�s with
But alas the pale face death brought
With chilling hands left to rot
And my love left as merely a thought

Now solitude�s my only companion
For the rats have died of the latest famine
Besides the writing and it�s damning
That changed from it�s once romancing
Of days filled with lovely glancing
To these of solitude and its advancing
Past the life of my yesteryears love
Where I am the only left above

And on these nights I still do not praise
For a new loved one or better days
For my love�s grave lays down yonder
Past where only the lonesome squander
Where miles are walked only to ponder
How their loves they once did fonder
That once nature cared for in womb
Now lay beneath her inevitable tomb

Reviews

[~crazy Beautiful~]

"On nights like these I praise no more
For the loss of my only ardor
Was taken so many nightly years ago
And with it went my heart ten fold
Now lost in all of losses lunacy
Misery now beckons at my door
With the grave of my ardor out yonder yore
Broken and cracked yet not forgotten lore"
I felt connected with this piece
I enjoyed it very much
saddens the soul
perfection in poetry
beautiful
nice work
thank you for entering my contest

[Andromeda]

it's like Poe, but at the same time it's not. i really like your choice of words and the rhythm. great job!

[Dressed in Poetry]

You know, I didn't actually think of Poe until I saw some of the other reviews, and then when I reread it I saw a few similarities. Yet despite those, you still have your own style. I love the diction. I'm picky when it comes to word choice, but I love yours. It's nice that you rarely repeat words, and the ones you do repeat are ones that need to be repeated. I like this a lot.

[Chandra]

i agree, sounds like poe. but nicely done.

[E. M. Murren]

This is a really nice work. I am not good with the confines of rhyme but you did a fine job with it. It is rather Poe-like to me. I like it a lot. Well done.

[Jenny Davis]

I think if you would break free of the somewhat metered rhyme scheme you would do much better
But good write :)