Echoes Of Silence

Enjoy or don't...

My body is numb

Nothing I can feel

No more I can say

Here to rest forever

Here to rot forever

Nobody to talk to

No one to listen

Just echoes,

Echoes of silence 

In a molding casket

The worms eat at me

My dead flesh sours

I can't take it anymore

Why must this be death

Why not just nothing

A lifetime in a box

Not my idea of heaven

Not even close to hell

Author's Note

Umm what do you think? Too much? Not enough?

Reviews

[Stephanie M]

I can relate to your poem. I know how it feels to go through life feeling invisible, and ignored. I know how it feels when no one takes you seriously.

[maria ( rose)]

by golly, unbelievable. A clever write!!! BravO my friend .

[Jack Kennedy]

Thank you for reviewing, i try to be clever as possible.

[maria ( rose)]

you're very welcome :)

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

A staggering write you have here. Nicely put together.

[Ana B.]

the staggering truth of the afterlife......well put. Enjoyed reading!

[Kasey Miriam]

I really enjoyed this. There is one thing I would personally change. The first here you use I would change to lay, but thats just my oppinion. Great job keep it up!

[Jack Kennedy]

Actually I do like that idea! Thanks for the suggestion! And also thanks for the review as well! Much appreciated

[Kasey Miriam]

You are very welcome. Always happy to read.

[Symphonic_Sunflowers]

This was really good - a great perspective - good job, Jack!

[TL Boehm]

I think this is indicative of why I want to be cremated. It is a humbling, stark thought - this is the future we all share.
Well penned. Strongly written.

[Jack Kennedy]

Thank you!! I'm glad you enjoyed it!

[Dark Poet]

Definitely a wonderful perspective i enjoyed reading in. Dark and creepy and gets shivers in your skin.

[Jack Kennedy]

Thank you for the read! Take Care

[TPK Stories]

This sent shivers up my spine...a true depiction of death and loneliness...well written...I think is is just right....

[Jack Kennedy]

Thank you! I thought I replied to this way earlier! Sorry for that. I appreciate your reviews and comments always

[just Penny]

I'm drinking of the darkness this poem exudes and breathing in it's chilling air. I think you do the dark theme exceptionally well, Jack. Vivid descriptions of menacing images and a somber mood all blend perfectly. Penny :)

[Jack Kennedy]

Thank you!! I guess the darkness is more soothing for whatever reason. Thanks again for the reviews and Take Care!!

[just Penny]

I know ! Even if I am in a happy phase, I always prefer to write dark. Maybe I'm just twisted :)

[Jack Kennedy]

Yeah, I understand that completely. Its just sooooo appealing to me. I guess I'm not with the happy endings in stories due to the predictability.