Ours.

The memory I will cherish,

The one that pulled me through,

The one that will forever,

Keep me thinking about you.

 

No tears came from my eyes,

No sadness from my heart,

With this memory so strong,

We will never be kept apart.

 

We were standing, just talking,

Somewhere, well I don’t know,

But the laugh we laughed so loudly,

Follows me wherever I go.

 

We cackled a witchy cackle,

For no reason like we do,

I laugh we laughed we always did

And then I feel close to you.

 

To some I might seem selfish,

To laugh instead of cry,

To some I might seem heartless,

Because I refused to say good bye.

But I laugh because it’s yours,

I laugh because it’s ours,

I laugh because I know you're there,

When I look up at the stars.

 

 

 

Author's Note

opinions please
this needs to be as perfect as it can get
thankyouu

Reviews

[Poetic Beauty]

This is beautifully done. If you are able to celebrate someones life after they pass it kinder to the soul. Many may not understand your grieving process but that doesn't matter for each person mourns in their own way. I think the is a great way to remember someone. Their laughter echoing through time and space forever warming your heart after they are long gone.

[T. Greyman]

I can tell this is a very sentimental piece.
It's very striking and definitely brings to mind my own fond memories.
Great use of words, simple yet they tell a lot.
A very good poem.

[oh,hey.]

thankyou :)

[Ohhhwillow]

"I laugh because it's yours, I laugh because it's ours". This for me is striking - our sentiments make the slightest things special. Lovely write

[oh,hey.]

ohh thankyou!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

I think this is cool, love the rawness and joyfull landscape of emotion painted in this poem, I suggest to keep it as the original the progression is amazing. Good work.

[Dr. Wood ?]

I agree with Quiffin..but to be even more perfect you have to alter the first line of the third verse from we WAS standing..to we WERE standing

[oh,hey.]

thank you! changed it!

[.]

Very nicely done..
since you asked you may want to work this section
the first line
and the last line

we was standng, just talking
Somewhere, I don’t exactly know,
but the laugh we laughed so loudly,
we follow me wherever I go.

[oh,hey.]

I have changed it?
im not sure if it's better

[Time's The Bond]

So much meaning, very beautiful,i t left an impression.

[oh,hey.]

thankyouuu

[quinfinn]

strike "and always" from line three. other than that this flows pretty nicely and is a good read. i don't think you should overthink a write like this. it lends your personality in the most sincere way and works well. very nice!