You Always Were....

So, you're gone now.

I can't really believe it.

You were always there.

But you can't be there for me anymore, can you?

 

You always were brave,

And faced the highest diving board as if it were a dwarf.

Not caring if the dark water below

Caught your breath for a few moments.

 

Because, in the end, you came back up,

Laughing and pointing at my frightened face.

I had thought the blackness had caught you.

Did you know that?

 

You always said you got a thrill from it.

Jumping, I mean.

Did the thrill come when you pulled out the gun?

That's sort of like jumping, right?

 

Leaping into the unkown, with no one to catch you.

But you didn't have to.

I could have caught you,

If you had told me where you had been going.

 

All the blackness you had closely evaded.

The stormy waters you had crossed.

God d****t, why couldn't you have told me?

I would have been there, and...

 

You wouldn't be.

You wouldn't be dead.

Beacause that's what you are now, and...

And you can't turn it back.

 

You always were brave.

Fearless, and facing the jump.

But there is one thing I can't stop wondering.

Were you scared?

Reviews

[alexlessah]

very nice.

[Ravyne Hawke]

This is a well written haunting poem, Lucy. So many beautiful lines, so much love shining through.. the last stanza was a real zinger for me.. summed up the entire poem perfectly. Well done!

[Lively]

Good.

[Veronica Chandler]

This was so beautifuly and tenderly written and I am left with the same questions as you, not the least of which, "were you scared?"
Wow Lucy, so well written; this one well...it had me on the edge of my seat.

[Jibin]

"So, you're gone now.
I can't really believe it......"
Nice work!! I'm loving it....

[Seshat Nidaba]

'I had thought the blackness had caught you. Did you know that?' - I find this line haunting. Somehow it reminds me that Shelley died at Sea!

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

You have penned well a very sensitive subject. Left your readers wondering the same thing your character wonders. Excellent Lucy