Speak to me Rain and Fire

Speak to me Rain and Fire

A Poem by Yani De Los Reyes

The sound of rain dropping
The pavement shines like silver
Sky so gray and lifeless
Teardrops falling from above...

Shaped to little puddles of water
I stand there under the crying sky
Staring at ripples of curiosity
I stare with utmost uncertainty

Ballerinas dance around me
The feeling of guilt runs in me
Surprised, I just watched them
Where were they coming from?

I tried to make an escape
but they all surrounded me
There was no way out
I was trapped in a hard cage

I wanted to fly but something happened
These two eyes couldn't believe
To see the blinding color of red and yellow
Burning nothing but the icy atmosphere

The dancing group of fragile flowers danced
While I was thinking of my life, I danced too
Gracefully moving with the cold wind
Speak to me Rain and Fire

Everything came to a halt
It was not a dream. Not a reality.
It was..
Somewhere in between..

Completely unexplainable...

© 2010 Yani De Los Reyes


Author's Note

Yani De Los Reyes
I got this from a musical piece. It was beautiful so I had to write something about it. :P

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I love this very much.. can't explain it though but i really like it.. i'm a music lover myself and this is so.. unexplainable. :P good job!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Oh wow... this is wonderful... those times in the inbetween are precious indeed. We can take these moments and see into other dimensions sometimes...what is going on in your unconcious is out there for you to grasp if you can figure out the encrypted symbols. Wonderful indeed!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Dear Writer,

A little on the lengthy side, which can be a problem, but overall well illustrated poem. It really does convey your intent to the reader. At times, I feel like there's too much illustration too fast. The ending lines are beautifully illustrated and summed in the last few lines, "Everything came to a halt // It was not a dream. Not a reality. // It was... // Somewhere in between... // Completely unexplainable." Somewhat like an "Alice in Wonderland" but much more practical in an average-every day life than just a fictional story tale.

It's very well carried out. I couldn't find anything here to critique, so it's a good job. Remember to use grammatical punctuation, because it "matures" your poem. Maybe that's just me. I can proofread it if you want me to. And not every line in a poem has to start with a capital letter. I love the emphasis on Rain and Fire as they are the main emphasis both in the title and the first five stanzas. Very well written! Good job and keep it up! 9.4/10.

A Friend and a Writer,
S. W. Scaggs

Posted 11 Years Ago


nice write,loved it
the title was eye catching.

Posted 11 Years Ago


A wild and crazy dream? The words flowed in the story. You create a wild vision with powerful statements and your very good description. Ending was perfect for this poem. Thank you.
Coyote

Posted 11 Years Ago


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Joe
This is a really good poem. It has great description and rhythm. Great job!

Posted 11 Years Ago



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Yani De Los Reyes
Yani De Los Reyes

Quezon City, National Capital Region, Philippines



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I'm a 12 year old girl turning 13 after 3 more months. I'm a person just like you. Ordinary yet special in the eyes of the Creator. Making Art is my passion and writing is one of my most favorites. An.. more..

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