Trepidation

another old one

Resolute

stood the mountain laurel

on the little hill.

Steadfast

held her leaves of green

to the noble sun--

and came along the little Bee

curious and bold.

His whispered words

of Trembling pulses

Yielded forth the prize.

 

Reviews

[I, Rene]

This IS very Emily like, it reminds me of a movie, an english man went up a hill and came down a mountain, I was so impressed by that true story made for movie, Like I am by this beautiful poem. To stand resolute in ones convictions, is a beautiful thing, so stand resolute while the bee whispers, well that's nature calling :)

[Larry Dyson]

Has an old time pollination appeal..Laury

[MAC]

perfect from the title on down! an excellent write Miss Burns!

[Leslie Philibert]

A poem full of fine words, mountain laurel is great, as is little Bee, an affectionate, intimate expression, I like noble sun too. Enjoyed this, fine write.

[SpitfireGrrrl]

You manage to put so much into a few short lines. I like the importance you've given to various words - it breaks the rhythm when you are reading to yourself, and makes it that much more. To me, anyway :)

[h d e rushin]

are you really Emily Dickinson?
nice work, dana.

[Emily B]

i wanted to be her when i was a little girl

i think we might be kindred spirits

[icaros13]

This reminds me much of another poetess named Emily, who's writing I admire... (admission of which is the highest form of icaros13 style praise)

[Emily B]

i wanted to be her when i was a little girl, she was my childood idol

[icaros13]

I thought I was the only little kid that idolized poets... My brother read "Miniver Cheevy" to me and I became a E. A. Robinson disciple... "Amaryllis" is one of my all time ultimate favorites.

[Emily B]

oh, Miniver Cheevy was a favorite . . . and Edgar Lee Masters people portraits

[icaros13]

I haven't read much Edgar Lee Masters... I'll have to check him out. I love the classics.

[Emily B]

start with "Silence"

[icaros13]

After reading "Silence", I think I love him.

[Emily B]

i read it often - just because i can

[eglantine]

FIRST! i love the title, ok now to actually read the poem. I've never been a fan of capitalized words within the poem, like "Trembling" I just don't think that word is important enough to warrent so. I do like "trembling pulses" very nie tactle and auditory image

[Ken Simm.]

Your words these days capture something unique in almost every line. They follow your thoughts precisely and leave an indelible mark on those of us who read them.

[Mary]

words of trembling pulses...beautiful