Glowing

inspired by the song "Glowing" by the wonderful band The Script ♥

i found myself being pushed to the floor by the one i thought loved me

there were tears flowing from your eyes, streaking the face i had dreamed of for many nights again and again

i saw how i could not speak

listening to those words that shocked me so

the secrets spilling out as much as the tears coming from your eyes

a raggedy black suitcase banged against the floor where i now sat in pain and shock

you run and run and run away from me

was it me?

you have a ticket to who knows where

not even you know

you don't want me to follow you, that i can see clear as day

but yet i chase you

i won't stop no matter what could happen

i would follow you forever

that much is true

i don't care if we get lost

as long as we are together 

i'm with you and i'm glowing

i woke up this morning

all alone in the motel room

i learnt that you'd not left long ago...

you were running away...running away, why?

"And we don't even know where were going
But I'm fleeing with you and I'm glowing (ooh)
And we drove all night with all we got
We have everything we own in a cardboard box
And we drove all night with all we got
We got everything we own in a cardboard box
And we drove all night with all we got
We have everything we own in a cardboard box"

Author's Note

that's all i can manage...this is a hard song to write a poem based on...please be easy on the reviews i personally think it is awful but i thought i should post it so i can have some help with it
here is the link to the lyrics in case any of you are curious: http://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/script/glowing.html

***this isnt a poem, it is a poem/short story, i dont intend for it to be reviewed as a poem***

Reviews

[Amber Lily]

The song itself may not have much detail but you clearly understood the main message of it. Being able to create a piece from other pieces of work (be it music or poems or art) is beautiful because you are inspired by them and were able to make something new :)
Well done!

[Ma'at]

i just love bands and it really helps me a lot :) (and also makes me insanely depressed but that's not the point) the song is detailed and the way he sings tells a story, so when i heard that song i was like, "oohh! i can easily make this my own by rewriting it as something else!"
thank you! :)

[Matching Socks]

Oh no darling... I am not going easy on this review! No way. :-)
How old are you again????

I'm just amazed sometimes, because you're so good.
I love the way you've set the back drop for the song.
Great job.

~A~

[Ma'at]

I'm 14. And I just really did not think this was good at all...idk...but thank you anyways!

[Troy Henson]

This was a great read. You did very well with this one.

Regards
troy

[Ma'at]

really? oh. well thank you very much :)