[Sweetest Kiss Goodbye]

 

Soft kisses down my throat

Followed swiftly by harsh bitterness

My senses slowly dimmed away

Vodka enticing me through this mess

 

With drugs; my defense against

The brutality of reality

As ecstasy and vodka mix

The sweet release of sanity

 

The memories and related pain

Fade with drugged awareness

This deadly sleep I induced

Please; leave me here senseless

 

Slip from my stool so far away

The terror gone that forced me here

Can’t say I’m sorry; but goodbye

No tears shed in knowing death is near

 

Reviews

[Marie]

Nicely done.

[Tessa Le Rouge]

a great peice. very well written. good job! i enjoyed it. sorry i havent been on in a while so im reviewing a lot now, im very happy i clicked on this one. once again, good job.

[Celtic Cat]

Your first two lines remind me of a quote that I've always felt suited my love life to a T : "I've never tasted a sweet that wasn't bitter". Don't ask me who I quoted, for all I know it's me, lol!! But I don't really think so.
the sweet release of sanity

[Raven Held]

I like how you played on the regulated rhyme scheme that screams in contrast with the theme of the poem. Plus, your rhyming is natural, unlike some that present an overly cautious attempt to make the words rhyme.

Very nicely done. Thanks for sharing!

Loves,
Raven

[Gary H]

Rachel, you will be an excellent poet if you keep working like this. As much as I don't read poems to pick out bits I don't like or agree with I do seem to do that an awful lot. This one though is very good - would be better if you removed the 'the's from the beginning of a few of the sentences though. Otherwise I really enjoyed reading this (although the subject matter is obviously sad)

[EGabriellS]

Very realistic. Thanks for sending it to me. :)

[Rie Sheridan Rose]

A very haunting and disturbing piece. One hopes it is not speaking from personal experience, Rachel! You do get the incoherence down very well. It is extremely thought-provoking....

[Captain Blackheart (The..]

A very good look at this perspective. Well written how the sence of substances can take away for reality.